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Wet
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 60
Brentwood, Tn

0 posted 2000-05-01 10:53 PM


The Heartless Whore

When I met you,
You had a heart.
When I thought I knew you,
You had my heart.
And as I fell for you,
You played a game with my mind.
Your insanity filled my heart with rage,
My mind leaves me now as you crush my heart.
It exploads, my fragile life,
As the knife cuts my flesh from my arm.
My arm that you once held on to.
Me, The one that fell for you.
The blood is overwhelming,
Just like my lost and forgotten rage.
And my love, like my mind,
Is gone....
Just when I met you,
Just when I thought I knew you,
You played a game,
One that crushed my heart.
One that made you forget who you are.


© Copyright 2000 David Danielson - All Rights Reserved
devina
Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
1 posted 2000-05-02 12:50 PM


I feel alot of pain and anger in this piece m'friend, and that's never good. Things will go on in life, and one day you will be over this...here's a hug to help you along....  ((((HUG))))))

Take care
~D

lucky
Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
2 posted 2000-05-02 01:10 AM


I have to agree with devina, there's a LOT of anger dripping from the page. I hope everything is alright and you just needed to vent it. Still... I have to say, it's writen well.

 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley)

mete out
Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
3 posted 2000-05-02 04:22 AM


**wet,
i have been through this anger and rejection.
our circumstances may not have been the same, but i can feel your anger.
this poem is fantastic.
i'll be watching!


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



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