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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
Is it ok, if I dont feel today my Angel left and took my smile with her. I watched as she took flight wings beating gently in the autum dusk, and though I stood beside her all along I was never hers and she was never mine. She said goodbye with a kiss and glittering breathe, she stroked my cheek leant close to my ear and told me my secret, finally. I cried like a child, sobbing hard with gratitude, and she sang to sooth my tears. One last time she let me look into her eyes and see the past we had the present we lost and the future we could never carry home with us. Her farewell made my garden turn all the shades of sadness, made my trees weep and their branches could nearly touch the ground. She let me touch her wings, and feel the beauty an Angel always gives, selflessly, purity, and I was altered by her. At last, my Angel took to the amber sky and one small hand waved farewells which fell on me as silverblue which fell on me as things to do Is it ok, if I dont feel today my Angel left and took reality away. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
So many feelings and emotions run thru my head as I read this beautifully written yet sad poem...one of my favorites to read and I hope your angel will return to you...James |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
enjoyed this a lot ... very well written thankyou for sharing this with us Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Fool~ With this tender render from your pen you have kissed an angel goodbye. Sometimes we just have to be thankful that we were touched by an angel, if only for a little while. Beautifully done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
Thankyou all for your comments. I liked this one myself  |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Deeply sad words, but woven in an exquisite form. Lovely work! *Krista Knutson* "Lonliness is the human condition." *Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"* |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
I like it and i can relate. i love the lines. normally i don't like free verse, but this was good. it had rhythem and it felt, and it was just plain ol' good. i dig it. We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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FadingSun Member
since 2000-05-01
Posts 76Southern California |
Too often are angels kissed goodbye It seems unavoidable No matter how hard we try. Too rarely are words woven like that of your poem Touching all who read it Hitting some close to home. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey, fool, nice to see ya!! I like this poem too.. You've got some really wonderful insights into life... hehe.. You're not quite the foolish that you credit yourself, I see...  |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Is it ok, if I dont feel today my Angel left and took reality away. This poem took my breath away!! So beautiful and full of emotion. Your angel will always be with you inside your heart...I know mine is! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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daft Junior Member
since 2000-05-02
Posts 16 |
Lovely, what else can I say? I think that your angel will return to you someday, even if she wasn't truly yours to begin with. |
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