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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Foretaste And there, with each savored swallow, each breath nearly an audible moan, with each slow lazy sweep of your hazel eyes across my swelling lips, my throat, my hands... and visions then, arising private and fleeting, but shared, in the telling. the scene I see from within your eyes as real and urgent as my own... We wait, and watch, and listen to the poison soundings of our moistened lips.  ClaireCould a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, Oh my, oh my, I can only give you one big sigh. *L* |
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A.C.Turner Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 83Reading, Pa.Home of Bardfest |
Very in the moment. I like the way it flows too. Smooth and hot. Passionate. ACT. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Very beautiful Claire!! *sigh*. . . like waking up with someone you love and seeing them with that first glance of morning. . . Wonderful poem. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire, I always look for your poety...this one is so sensory it almost hurts, but it feels too good. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Packs a punch .. yet delivered so softly. Beautifully spoken as usual. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
All right, all right... I'm out of my league. I see you wonderful girls could really make my head swimmmmm... Where's the boundry on this forum anyway. Well it couldn't be to far I can still see the golf course from here... Who's Lucky anyway..? If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This took my breath away - but I was bewildered by the one word "poison" - it was a sensual love song to me, until I reached that word. Ah, well, sometimes a person just can't comprehend it all! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow... dripping with sensuality this is. Wonderful images drawn (dang near felt) here. Doesn't get much better than this, Claire. Michael |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Seymour...I will see your sigh and raise you another. Thanks for the myohmy's.  ACT...thank you for reading this...that you enjoyed makes me glad. Sven...yes, so very much like that... thank you... Martie...how nice of you to say. (not that that surprises me ~ you are always so gracious) Marge...thank you for such encouraging words. You liked this one? I'm glad. Lucky...thank you for reading... Out of your league? Not for a moment! Rosemary...the "poison" here is actually just used figuratively, as to depict a sort of "taboo" or a forbidden emotion. This poem is about two people who are about to get into trouble...or at least wanting to. (if'n you know what I mean...) Thank you...I'm glad you mentioned that and gave me the opportunity to address it. Hi Michael Dripping? I think I like that description...thank you... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very passionate and very well written, Claire! Denise |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
fluid sensual passionate...a wonderful read! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Claire I don't know exactly whats going on here but it sure is sensual and sexy and enticing and lovely...James |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise...thank you for reading, my friend, and for the enthusiastic reply! Beki...wonderful comment, thank you so much...glad you found this enjoyable reading. James...sensual and sexy and enticing and lovely...you think? all those nice things?? Thank you for reading and sharing your kind thoughts... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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