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The Scream Of Silence

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Effigy
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since 04-11-2000
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Just sitting at the computer


0 posted 05-01-2000 02:24 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Effigy

On the couch with
my soul in my hands.
I donít want to go outside today.
The light burns my eyes,
my skin withers and dies.

~DARKSTAR~

Eyes closed, sowing my head on straight.
Iím inside out, or is that outside in?
Iím claustrophobic of the outside world.
No, I donít want to go outside today,
but inside this place I just canít stay.

~DARKSTAR~

Youíre wasting, Iím wasted,
on the inside, perfect outside.
Iím
burning my bridges to the floor.
To the multitudes Iíll shout,
but only on the inside reaching out.

~DARKSTAR~

Burning brightly in my eyes.
I cower among the shadows.
On the inside sweating cold.
On the outside Iím getting old.

~DARKSTAR~

I canít go outside today!

~DARKSTAR~

It never leaves me alone!

~DARKSTAR~

Wonít let me go outside today!

~DARKSTAR~

I scream with indifference!

~DARKSTAR~

I close my eyes.


 understanding is misunderstood

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DiObear
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since 04-30-2000
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Switzerland


1 posted 05-01-2000 02:49 PM       View Profile for DiObear   Email DiObear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DiObear

Very powerful. I don't know what else I can say...

DiObear


 
Denise
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2 posted 05-01-2000 03:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You've expressed the turmoil very well in this, Effigy. You have made me feel what it must be like to have that fear. Well done!

Denise
forne_marin
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since 04-13-2004
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Spartanburg, South Carolina


3 posted 04-16-2004 12:01 AM       View Profile for forne_marin   Email forne_marin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit forne_marin's Home Page   View IP for forne_marin

"The Scream of Silence"--Okay. #1. It's a very moving piece. It evokes fear and confusion in the reader. The emotional appeal of the poem is very real. #2. What the heck are you talking about? I can't make sense of it at all. What is a Darkstar? You have your emotional punch, but past that... you can do better.
 
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