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Corazon
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0 posted 05-01-2000 09:56 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

downward spiral

lower and lower I slid
into the bowels of
hatred
until I could feel the tips
of hell's fire
reaching for my soul

upwards
from here
the only reasonable option

drinking the healing words
pouring forth
I found a foothold and
slowly started
the climb

trying to forget that this was not
and would never be
love
and grasping only towards
the promise of friendship
I progressed
upward
but the coldness
impeeds
frostbite numbs
from the inside
out

and today
sadly, yet again
the downward spiral
takes me
I don't know why
I let it
a lifetime of slipping
letting go
too easily

I could say it was the
recoil from the slice
of your
ever sharp tongue
cutting at my fragile hold
but maybe
this time
if I was honest
I would say
I let go
because
I missed the
heat






[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-01-2000).]
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DiObear
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1 posted 05-01-2000 10:17 AM       View Profile for DiObear   Email DiObear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DiObear

Corazon,

I really liked this.  I've done the 'downward spiral' myself a few times, until I got tired of the 'heat.

DiObear
brandondinsmore
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2 posted 05-01-2000 10:49 AM       View Profile for brandondinsmore   Email brandondinsmore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brandondinsmore

indeed, corazon.  how i have felt these same ways and these equal feelings.  ev'rything seems hopeless sometimes, yet something keeps you always yearning for this thing which can overwhelm us so easily, Love.  Oh how I lothe Love sometimes, but then i remember that i can't, for i have never truly loved or been loved...
true words come from your heart, and treasured they shall be...
Denise
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3 posted 05-01-2000 11:22 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! This is excellent writing, Corazon!! I'm sure we've all experienced that spiral a few times. I especially loved the ending, too!

Denise
Corazon
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4 posted 05-01-2000 01:06 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

DiO, brandon, denise, thank you much  ...it is my life right now, till I find a way to break the cycle...*sigh*....but I haven't stopped trying  
Martie
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5 posted 05-01-2000 01:40 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Very good writing...so honest, and I loved the last part!
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6 posted 05-01-2000 01:52 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Well, I've set up residence on rock bottom... providing you with a nice soft landing spot. *G* So if you'd be so obliging, please land gently. LOL

Great poem, sad lady!
warmhrt
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7 posted 05-01-2000 01:58 PM       View Profile for warmhrt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for warmhrt

Very nice work, Corazon! Right now I'm in about the same position on the spiral as you are...it's no fun, is it? But, you have to say...this, too, shall pass. Hopefully soon!
Corazon
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8 posted 05-01-2000 02:09 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

martie, thanks  
suthern...lol@land gently....how bout you just scoot over and I will join you....sigh...thanks for the smiles...coming from rock bottom, they mean much
wrmheart...yep....and thanks I needed to read that today....this too shall pass...*long deep sighs*
Parker
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9 posted 05-01-2000 02:10 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Corazon, this seemed ever personal, a slide into the abyss, sometimes we go there just to help us escape. loved the read.

Parker
bboog
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10 posted 05-01-2000 02:33 PM       View Profile for bboog   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bboog's Home Page   View IP for bboog

C~ I think you hit the mark on this one. The honesty of it made it special. Good writing.
best regards,
bboog
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11 posted 05-01-2000 03:49 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon~
I always enjoy your writing.
Hope the 'spiral' picks you up and
brings you back to the top.
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Corazon
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12 posted 05-01-2000 05:30 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

haleyja, thanks, and yes you might be right...escaping is a coping mechanism...I hadn't thought of that  

bboog...thank you  

marge...thanks...and yep me too *looking up with hope*
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you wrote me here
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