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Chastity Undone.....Part two
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Chastity Undone.....Part two |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Chastity Undone.....Part Two and that was all there was to it. You took me back to the place where I started in moonlight that had pushed me and now folded me in the cobwebs of the corner of the hall as I climbed my girlhood stairs with my woman. And I slept with her for the first time naked under cotton sheets and I felt the wealth of something new and opening that I knew measured my becoming. In the morning there was a tremble in my hand as I touched my tangled tresses and stains of green tinged my feet as that dew-damp spell broke in mirrored fragments across the rose carpet where sun laced towards me in the provocative movement of time. I felt your brown eyes still moving across me as I looked to see what I had become and saw still the rounded belly of a girl waking blurred and imperfect with stretching circumference. But there was a difference and I felt its unsure steps that moved me forward when what I wanted was to turn and run run run back to the porch swing of safety where this dream was born and I would never be again… |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Martie, Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful as Lawrence Welk would say. I was kind of waiting for others to jump on this. I knew this morsel couldn't end where it was left. I dropped you a e-mail but I'm about to send another... Let you in on my life a little. We're back in WA. checking for land, watching the kids, getting a new RV transmission. I tell ya where is Marge when ya needs her. I have to tell you "part 2" is outstanding. We have an upper sun deck I built with a porch swing, we sit and write there often. RJ loves it as she likes to dream and too likes the cool. By the way does the saga continue..? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well...I am a poor stand-in for Marge--but nevertheless, here I am... This poetry pure...reads so sweet and easily, and still...went down like liquid fire...I am awed. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Again .. the demure smile of Marge.  Lady ... you are elegance personified. *Lucky~ Here our gal is pouring her memories across the page ... and typical guy that you are ... you're thinking 'transmissions' ! LOL ! We're located in 5 states .. just not WA .. YET ! Love all ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You've captured in words so perfectly a personal experience and pulled the reader into it! Excellent writing, Martie! Denise |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
lucky....I love three wonderfuls and a part three, sure there is...and on and on...and I'm so glad you like my writing...pleases me, no end. Serenity--what a wonderful reply, thank you! Marge--somehow I just can't picture demure..hey, you in California? Denise--thanks so much for the excellent. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Martie, I don't know how I missed #1, this was unbelievable. I felt the yawn of the past emotions circleing you in these words. Must find number 1. Bravo Martie Parker |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, BRAVO!, my friend ABSOLUTELY SUPERB WRITING! and I love ya for it Liz |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hey, Martie~ YES ! We are, as a matter of fact. Bakersfield and Roseville ... thank ya' mam ! You got a hankering for an RV ? Check out www.recUSA.com Just tell 'em that Marge sent you ! LOL ... Love ya', gal ! ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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