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Epitaph (In response to the I Am challenge)

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hsystems
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0 posted 05-01-2000 12:30 AM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Author's Note:  This is actually a poem that I wrote a few years ago.  It doesn't follow the rules of the "I Am" challenge - I will write one to follow the rules later on.  But, the "I Am" challenge brought it to mind.

      Epitaph
  
Read me
The story of my life
My hopes and dreams
My doubts and fears
Inscribed on parchment
Which shall endure no longer
Than my mortal body
  
Hear me
The quiet whisper
Of a frustrated man
Who dreamed of greatness
But achieved only mediocrity
And who utterly failed
To make the world a better place
  
See me
The inner me
The beauty and goodness
Locked deep within my heart
Struggling to break free
Always searching, but never finding
The way to shine forth
  
Remember me
And the times that we shared
The smiles and laughter
The sorrow and tears
And know, always
That even though I accomplished little
I always tried
  
      -Troy J. Hoecherl-

© Troy J Hoecherl
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 Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry
http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm  




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© Copyright 2000 Troy Hoecherl - All Rights Reserved
Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 05-01-2000 12:40 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

WOW!!!
Troy , this says it all.
Great work.

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
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2 posted 05-01-2000 02:16 AM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Whoa...very deep.  Man, can't wait to see how you answer the challenge....


Alicat
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3 posted 05-01-2000 05:15 AM       View Profile for DestinysCharm   Email DestinysCharm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DestinysCharm

Your poem is written so well and dives so deep into your soul. Sometimes we don't realize the impact we have on others and we go on in life thinking we accomplished not near as much as we wished we could have, when actually we may have done lots more without even knowing. I bet this is true with you.  
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4 posted 05-01-2000 10:03 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I'm sure your words will long after you are gone, Troy. Also, you do shine! This is a wonderful heartfelt piece you have written here!

Denise
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5 posted 05-01-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Troy ----this is touching -- and deep.

You are not mediocre ----You will live
on long after you have decided to leave
this world ------on the lips of many a poet,
on your children's and their children's
and on your grave stone ------You have made
a difference --
And will continue to do so --------greatness
comes from inside ------------and you have
one of the biggest hearts that I know.

You have made a difference in my life.

hugs from netswan
hsystems
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6 posted 05-02-2000 03:25 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Thank you all for your kind responses!

Jeffrey - thanks, buddy!  I love you man, LOL!

Alicat - thank you!  I'm working on my poem for the challenge, right now - hope to have it done today.  

DestinysCharm - thanks so much for the encouragement!  If I can touch others the way that I have been touched and blessed by all the other poets here, I will feel that I have accomplished something wonderful, indeed!  

Denise - thank you for your kind thoughts!  I think that at the least, I'll live on through my daughter, and the lullabye that I wrote - which I sing her to sleep with.  

Teresa - WOW!  Thanks, that means a lot to me!  I hope you know how precious your friendship is to me, my dear friend!  From one big heart to another, here's a {{{HUG}}} back!  

Again, thank you all for your wonderful comments!


Troy

 Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry
http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm


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7 posted 05-02-2000 03:58 PM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Troy,
   You have touched on almost universal emotions and so very well! Again I enjoyed your work imensely, you're the best. keep posting.
                 David
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8 posted 05-03-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Wow.....this is great, my friend.  You are a fabulous and loving person, don't you ever for get that.  You have helped me more than i could ever tell you!!!!  Thank you, my friend!!!!!  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
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9 posted 07-04-2000 06:37 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

Fret not, my friend if all your poems are as good as this one is, rest assured that the world is made a better place by you leaving your poetic trails behind

most heart-wrenchingly honest...I enjoyed
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