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Lone Ranger
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Salvador , Bahia , Brazil

0 posted 2000-04-30 06:26 PM



The struggle is imminent
We are ready for the worst
The line between
Life and Death,
At this moment
Was reduced to
A matter of seconds
The fate of many soldiers
Is written , like the toss of a coin
Our hearts , are filled
Courage , Fear , Sorrow
All feelings mixed up
In every soldier's mind
And me , the  leader
I'm waiting for the sign
Waiting for the first arrow to be shot
But the moment will come
When my orders will be useless
For no one will be able
To hear me shouting
Among the screams of
A thousand suffering souls...


 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-04-30 07:17 PM


LoneRanger~
All too true, I fear.

'But the moment will come
When my orders will be useless
For no one will be able
To hear me shouting
Among the screams of
A thousand suffering souls...'

Touching and chilling.
~*Marge*~



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jbouder
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2 posted 2000-04-30 09:45 PM


Arrrrggghhhh!!! Part 3!  I need part three!!!    I like how you are building the tension here but if you make me pull out any more of my hair there won't be any left to pull ... *Jim desperately tries to turn the page to get a glimpse of what happens next*.

Out of my lair for the second time in a blue moon,

The JimBouderwocky

Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
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Salvador , Bahia , Brazil
3 posted 2000-04-30 10:33 PM


Thank you , Marge and Jbouder...
And , a third part, well , it's always a good idea to make a continuous poem i like it...
PS: At this rate , sooner or later I'm gonna right a book...

 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society

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