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DeEpMeLaNcHoLy
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since 2000-04-29
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0 posted 2000-04-30 02:15 PM


I am nothing
Therefore I do not give
I am no one
Therefore I do not live

I stare with concrete eyes
And sleep with emtpy dreams
But into these starry skies
Nothing is as bad as it seems

With every day, I shine
And wish that this pain will go
Cos this heart still is mine
Even though it has nothing to show


**i tried, its sucky**

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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2000-04-30 02:23 PM


Wrong on all counts!!! It is not 'sucky' and you are not 'nothing'...sorry about the double negative!

We write what is in our hearts so that can't be wrong or bad or worthless...you've shared yourself with us and we are all grateful.

It's very nice to meet you poetic friend!  

Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094
Coastal Texas
2 posted 2000-04-30 02:34 PM


Wrong, it's not sucky.  There can be no perfect answer to this challenge except what each writes...and in that, you have succeeded.  Thank you for joining us here at PiP, and for taking the time to answer this challenge in your own way.

But into these starry skies
Nothing is as bad as it seems

And these lines ring true, friend.  You are and will yet be a wonderful addition to our family.  


Alicat

ESP
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since 2000-01-25
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Floating gently on a cloud....
3 posted 2000-04-30 02:36 PM


You heard Sharon!! She said and I quote: "It's not "sucky" and you're not "nothing". Thank you for sharing from your soul with us. I like what I see so just keep being you and stop believing you are nothing cause you're not!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
4 posted 2000-04-30 04:48 PM


i agree with the others!! this is definitely not sucky and you are most definitely SOMEBODY! Each member of this forum makes up a special part of this wonderful family which I love so much! And you are no different...u are just as wonderful as the rest of them here! And that comes from Sunshine girl-ask Jan lol.

take care sweetie!!

Amy      

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Sven
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5 posted 2000-04-30 11:55 PM


Well, I would be remiss if I did not wholeheartedly agree with the wise miss deVine. . . this was quite good. . .

Welcome to Passions and we hope that you will become a regular member of the family. . .


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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
6 posted 2000-05-01 12:13 PM


lovely poem.  Great to meet you, melancholy.
this poem is not sucky, heheh and it
does show hope  -- which brings a warmth
to my heart.

netswan

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