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Oceans of Sorrow

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Michael
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0 posted 04-29-2000 12:15 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

OCEANS OF SORROW


Sand castles of hope, a dreaming myope,
I can't see the tide rolling in.
Oceans of sorrow, I know tomorrow
Is but the price of today's sin.

For who guards the dream, who knows self esteem
In the rise of ambivalence?
Ye, who holds the crest o'er sweet love's inquest?
Come to this fallen Knight's defense!

Seasons of splendor, oh, what grief you render
Tied to a stake facing the sea.
‘Er misunderstood, lo, by death of all good
Grant conquest by mere memory.

Darkness impeding, wounds fresh and bleeding,
Water arise, this won't take long.
Sharks in heed the call, what's left to forestall
Bloodlust unto the waiting throng.

Salt stinging, screaming, eyes lost to dreaming
Tear agonies that underlay -
Look upon the shore of hope, held no more,
Now given unto disarray.

Whereby windswept cry, a voiceless goodbye,
Ne'er finds peace within ocean grave.
Beckons evermore a maiden's deplore
There whispers upon every wave.

By mystic allure of a love so pure,
The angels spread their wings in flight.
By rise of the tide in chance to be bride,
All dance now before me in white.

Lo, as if this wail per chance could avail,
But her who awaits knight by day.
Who with love in hand builds castles of sand,
Cries nightly their washing away.

Michael Anderson


 For all behind was dark and drear,
And all before was night and fear.
How many hours of night or day
In those suspended pangs I lay,
I could not tell; I scarcely knew
If this were human breath I drew.

Lord Byron






[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 04-29-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
WolfsMate
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1 posted 04-29-2000 12:23 PM       View Profile for WolfsMate   Email WolfsMate   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WolfsMate

Such pain and anguish! Hope things are better for you soon.

 "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near"
Janet Marie
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2 posted 04-29-2000 12:27 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Whereby windswept cry a voiceless goodbye
Ne'er finds peace within ocean grave.
Beckons evermore a maiden's deplore
There whispers upon every wave.

By mystic allure of a love so pure,
The angels spread their wings in flight.
By rise of the tide for chance to be bride,
All dance now before me in white.

Lo, as if this wail per chance could avail,
But her who awaits knight by day.
Who with love in hand builds castles of sand,
Cries nightly their washing away.
--------------------

as if your poems weren't already brilliant enough...
now you take on this difficult
rhyme scheme (difficult for the rest of us..not you)
now your just showing off!! (smile) J/K

this is exceptional work once again M,
I need some new ~E~ words to decribe your work...
I have wore out excellent, exceptional, and exquisite.

 ~as always, Take Care,JM~
--------------
I know it's been a long road
To get these towns behind me and I
Will gladly reap what we may sow--
I am there for you ...
and you're there for me ...
Are you waiting for
Heart in hand
Woman and man
See me where I stand I am
Heart
Heart in hand
~vertical horizon~

Poet deVine
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3 posted 04-29-2000 12:47 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is so beautiful..a lilting, haunting poem...and it's true...we cry over that sand castle....maybe we should build it of brick?
Mistikman
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4 posted 04-29-2000 01:05 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Wow Michael, this is superb. Such sorrow and remorse tied up in this. Methinks I need to try using this format, I love when you use it so much.
doreen peri
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5 posted 04-29-2000 01:41 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

This, my friend, *IS* the art of poetry! Your writing is succinct, vivid, mystical, enrapturing... absolutely excellent!

God bless... and thank you for posting this... write or icq sometime...
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 04-29-2000 01:49 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Michael,
You washed me away,
In your sands of the day.
Excellent work.
Sy
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7 posted 04-29-2000 03:34 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Michael~
Merci !
Such a wonderful read-aloud piece.
Quite dynamic.
~*Marge*~


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8 posted 04-29-2000 05:51 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~michael

this was simply magnificent. i feel like my words are never near enough to describe your awesome work. you write with such intensity that i have rarely ever seen. it is apparent that it comes from the deepest parts of you. i feel blessed that you share it with all of us.

take care my friend!
amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Irish Rose
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9 posted 04-29-2000 08:44 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

only EXTRAORDINARY!!!

 Kathleen
indy31_99@yahoo.com


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10 posted 04-30-2000 01:27 AM       View Profile for Joel the wolf   Email Joel the wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Joel the wolf's Home Page   View IP for Joel the wolf

Very moving Michael, beautifuly put together.
Who with love in hand builds castles of sand.

Great works my friend.
Joel.

 I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.
Michael
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11 posted 04-30-2000 04:48 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wolfsmate, thing will improve soon, of that I am sure.  

Janet, enough ~e~'s already...LOL  TY.

PdV, maybe we shouldn't build at all? Sorry - had to say it... LOL  

Mistik, this is one of my favorite formats... Yes, you should give it a try sometime...

Doreen, quite a compliment there.  Deepest thanks to you.  I will be in touch - promise.

Sy, don't drift out there too far - I need your daily cleansing to ya know.

Marge, sincerest thanks.

Amy, 'tis from the deepest part of I write yes.  But 'tis i who should be thanking you for allowing me to share the experience.  

Thank you everybody for the kind replies.

Michael

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12 posted 04-30-2000 04:51 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Micheal,
How do you do it? I have yet to read a poem from you that I did not absolutely love?

Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
Skyfyre
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13 posted 04-30-2000 10:03 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

"...Who with love in hand builds castles of sand
Cries nightly their washing away ...
"

Would that we could learn to build them not of sand ...  

A well-written poem, Michael -- consistent theme, excellent adherance to a rather difficult rhyme scheme, and the meter wasn't too bad either!  I'm (moderately, mind you) impressed ...  

--Me


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

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gawd! ouch!
 
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