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Love Without Good-bye (revised & TY added)
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Love Without Good-bye (revised & TY added) |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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You knew I loved you < !signature-->yet you broke my heart You knew how much you meant to me why'd you tear my world apart I would've given you anything if you had only asked But you left me here with nothing wearing this fool's mask The least you could've done was take your memory when you left Then I wouldn't be sitting here lonely, all by myself I can't even begin to imagine why you felt you had to go All I know is the fact that I am here alone Without you the sun in my day, and now even that has gone away Love can be strange sometimes, it can make you happy, and it always makes you blind The good things we see the bad things we tend to deny If only two people could love each other without ever saying good-bye I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 04-30-2000).] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh, Jeffrey this is so sad ----if only. Well written --nice piece of work here. netswan --) |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Jeffrey, This was sad and those words good-bye well they are the worst two words I think there is. Wonderful writing here, thank you for sharing. Cerenity |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Jeffrey, I echo Cerenity. Be patient as there will be a new hello someday. Enjoyed the read. |
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DiObear Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 66Switzerland |
Jeffery, This is such a sad poem. But, I have to say I enjoyed it because I appreciate reading real emotions. Not all poems can be happy ones, can they? Sue |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Jeffrey...I may be a sentimental fool but I don't believe love ever ends in goodbye. True love always lives on in the heart and what is goodbye anyway? Just because two people can not live together or be with one another daily or even on a regular basis, that doesn't mean goodbye. Acceptence of what is meant to be and the willingness to love unconditionally, that is the key. Yeah, yeah, she is a hopeless romantic...lol.  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey, I love this one. And oh how I relate. I, too, wish there did not have to be good-byes. Sometimes though, it is the only way. Great writing!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You've brought tears to my eyes...this is amazing. Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Hey guys, I just realized this fits perfectly with another poem I wrote. You knew I loved you yet you broke my heart You knew how much you meant to me why'd you tear my world apart I would've given you anything if you had only asked But you left me here with nothing wearing this fool's mask The least you could've done was take your memory when you left Then I wouldn't be sitting here lonely, all by myself I can't even begin to imagine why you felt you had to go All I know is the fact that I am here alone Without you the sun in my day, and now even that has gone away Love can be strange sometimes, it can make you happy, and it always makes you blind The good things we see the bad things we tend to deny If only two people could love each other without ever saying good-bye If only love wasn't so demanding If only we were more understanding If only time could heal a broken home If only hearts didn't get broken If only you didn't have to go If only I didn't have to be alone In another time and another place maybe we could've shared a life together But who's to say that even then it would've lasted forever Maybe like fire and water it was never meant to be Even though we all sometimes get the urge to see Life has always been one question after another Maybe if we just keep asking we will one day discover....IF ONLY Thank you all for taking the time to read and respond to this little piece of my heart. I am truly grateful. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Wow another great poem. Thank you for thanking us and sharing your wonderful poetry. Hugs from netswan |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
two for the price of one...now who could ask for a better deal than that  Nice poems Jeffery |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
You know, men so seldom show their pain when someone leaves them...I've often wondered what goes through a man's mind. You have shared and portrayed the pain very well here. Makes me wish I would have done a few things differently in my past...My favorite part is..."take your memory with you when you go"....or however you said that! Wow, now that had PUNCH!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jeffrey, Good thoughts, good words, good poem. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Oh you poor little thing. Some country girl up and broke your poor little suthern heart! Well not to worry, I heard quit a bit about you North Carolina boys....hell I might move out that way myself! Marina |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
"IF ONLY" - what a pair of words those are! Two wonderful poems here! I think regret must be one of the most powerful and destructive emotions on earth. These are wonderful poems - both - and say so much. You write of lost love in such depth, and such sorrow. Thank you for sharing. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
very sad, very nice writing though, and yes I feel your pain.... |
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Willyg76 New Member
since 2000-05-02
Posts 5 |
Your poem was so moving, very nice piece of work -Willy "Kuessen mich leidenschaftlich, aber lieben mich tief" -Will Gibbins |
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