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tincan5
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since 2000-04-25
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0 posted 2000-04-27 08:44 PM


WHY

Who am I, Why am I here
Sad and alone on creations’ sphere
Life so empty, no purpose in sight
Hoping to live to see the next autumns’ light

This journey is so long, no end in sight
Why should I continue, to exist one more night?
For without purpose or reason life can never satisfy
That empty, aching feeling which makes my soul cry

What have I done to deserve this fate
Have I upset you somehow or made you irate?
Whatever my crime, please hear this plea
My days are so short, of that I can see

What do you want from this solitary man
What can I give you that you don’t already have?
It can’t be money or riches, of those I have few
With tears in my eyes I ask for one clue

I’m down on my knees and begging you please
Just an answer, a sign or a voice in the breeze
With so little time left I just have to know why
I was placed in a world that can never satisfy

Could it be my life, the way I’ve lived
Excluding your presence and failing to give
Honor and glory to your precious name
What a fool I was, I feel such shame

Why did I choose to live that way
Was it vanity or pride, who’s to say
Whatever the reason, it’s plain to see
I never became the man you hoped I would be

For me its too late, my candle has burned out
No flicker or flame, the wick cast to the ground
So I leave this world still sad and alone
With an aching heart I wonder, will I ever get home?

I will end this poem with one final plea
To the God of creation who made heaven and seas
Though as a man I failed to reach you’re heavenly goal
Please have mercy on me when you judge my soul

The end…….


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pen of passion
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since 1999-08-11
Posts 234

1 posted 2000-04-27 09:08 PM


Excellent work (perhaps your purpose is writing).  And I feel we all get home.
netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
2 posted 2000-04-27 09:55 PM


Great rhythmetic poem.

I agree with pen of passion - we learn
in life through our own experiences both
good and bad and sometimes we listen to others before we re-invent the wheel in our mistakes.

----and when we learn and
we have a talent such as yours - we teach
others what we know --- and hope they
will listen --)

netswan

Chico
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 67

3 posted 2000-04-27 10:11 PM


tincan5, Hey This is a good pem, it shows your sorrow, and your plea comes aross clearly, and as for asking God for mercy, when he judges your soul, well that question, is to be answerd on what you do down here.. make the right desicions.. take care now..

                             -Chico

tincan5
Junior Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 33

4 posted 2000-04-28 09:13 PM


So many questions as we travel along this "journey" called life. Are there really any "true" answers? Who can ever be sure?

Thank you to everyone who replied  

Kellsue
Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210
Waukesha, WI USA
5 posted 2000-05-11 09:12 AM


Tincan5 - I know you feel you may never find the answers to your "whys"  sometimes "because" is the only answer..and that's ok as long as you know in your heart that you're doing your best in this world.  I love your writing...  

~Kelly


 Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill


TerryW
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA
6 posted 2000-05-11 12:02 PM


tincan~
     I must also agree - very thought provoking and powerful poem.  We all travel the journey of life, and only the journey itself knows where we are going till we get there.  We just have to give the best of ourselves while we are making the trip!



 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

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