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Alwye
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In the space between moments

0 posted 2000-04-26 10:58 PM


Lacy fronds of faded jade
Sparkle with scattered dew
Wistful is the sultry air
As I yearn for love I knew.

Under gentle green's cascade
Bright wildflowers spray
And among butterfly thoughts
I wish for forgotten days.

Warm is the wafting breeze
Romancing the gentle boughs
But my heart is bitter cold
Where sun should be allowed.

Winter sets upon my soul
As summer sways in bloom
And my teardrops softly gather
Upon mother nature's loom.

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 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~




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pen of passion
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1 posted 2000-04-26 11:04 PM


Such a lovely poem.  Sad, but lovely.  Great contrast writing.
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2 posted 2000-04-26 11:20 PM


This is a beautiful, yet sad poem. I can relate to it very well. Great job.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

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3 posted 2000-04-26 11:26 PM


Krista,
this so lovely in its melancholy and longing.
and how well I relate to its emotions.
you mirror mine...ONLY...
yours are dressed up so much prettier(smile)
loved this one...
take care, jm


 Is it too much to find an answer,
Is it too much to hold you close.
Is it too much to find a reason,
Is it too much to free my soul --
From self control ...
And I know you're always waiting for me ...
You take me far away,
And I know you're holding me ...
And it's better now ...
~vertical horizon~



Dusk Treader
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4 posted 2000-04-27 12:40 PM


Boy, I feel uneasy commenting after Janet... You're contrasting of summer and the soul's winter was excellent, vividly illustrating the emotion of the piece.  Such longing and sadness and beauty described so wonderfully.. I only wish I could put mine to paper like you.  Stunning as always  

 Abrahm Simons

"...Watching fate as it flows down the path we have chose" - Trent Reznor, "We're in this Together"


Meadowmuse
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5 posted 2000-04-27 01:01 AM


Krista, I have to agree on the "stunning"...
This is rhythmic and abounding with images and irony. Wonderful crafting you've shared with us here. YOU are growing in poetry, dear one.

~ Claire

Alwye
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In the space between moments
6 posted 2000-04-27 09:57 PM


pen of passion- Thank you.  

LoveBug- Thank you also!

JM- It seems we have a lot of similar emotions.  Thank you for the lovely comments.

Dusk- Thank you my friend.  Your support and kindness means the world to me, Abe.  

Meadowmuse- Thank you so much.  Comments like that from a poet as wonderful as you are truly special to me.  


 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

Dawn Eclipse
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7 posted 2000-04-27 10:34 PM


Beautiful poem Krista, just stunning.  You put your emotions down on paper unlike anyone else I know.  I know I can't do that.  Krista, you're the best.



 "It is in our aloneness
that we recognize our oneness,
even as the single droplet of water
knows also that it is the sea."Daniel

*Cassie Roseen*



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