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Take Me to the Dance......
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Take Me to the Dance...... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Take me to a dance...she pleaded. Hold me on the floor. Make me feel romance I'm lacking Like you did before. Hold your body next to mine And let's begin anew. Take me to a dance......but I said "Sorry - no can do." Take me on a cruise....she whispered. Let's go out to sea. Anywhere you choose I'll follow, Only you and me. Hold me in the moonlight as The stars come into view. Take me on a cruise....but I said "Sorry - no can do". My life had been a helter-skelter Energy was spent So much so I hadn't felt her Growing discontent. Then, by the time the truth had hit And I became aware That she had gotten tired of it.... She was no longer there. Come with me to dance....I plead now. Meet me on the floor. I have the romance you need now Stronger than before. Let's go on that cruise...I'm ready Sail the ocean blue. Give me one more chance....but she says "Sorry - no can do." Much too late I now discover One cannot ignore Little things that make a lover Know that she's adored. I had broken all the laws of Keeping our love true So I sit alone because of... Things I did not do.. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You got that right, Balla"dear," the minute we take each other for granted, poof! For me, one of life's hardest lessons. Thanks for reminding us of how to live each day. Corinne |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Great rhyming, with a lesson oh so true~ Marie~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balla dear, Well you did it again, great poem, great lesson and a great friend. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
It seems like lesson learned too late ..... but then, maybe not !!!! Next time around ..... Excellent, as always, 'Deer One .... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"Do you like Pina Coladas? And a slow falling rain?" Well done, 'Deer!!! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
another witty entry yuh i must say kinda made me think o the givin tree in reverse |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You are so full of wonderful, meaningful poems, deer...this one is great! (pssst....I'll go dancing with you!) |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My thanks to you all for your kind responses. I DO like pina coladas, by the way. Martie, forget it! Your husband builds crosses. I don't want one as a tombstone  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Unfortunately neglect cannot be undone. But, then, this is just a poem, right? And well done as always. Liz |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Little things that make a Lover know that she is adored." Excellent writing with a message we all should keep close to our hearts. Take care of the Love in your life. James |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Why you sweet sentimental thang !  I like this a whole bunch-a-lot ! They say 'if you dance you gotta pay the piper.' And if you don't dance ... the piper's gonna swipe her. Franni ... take this man dancing on a cruise ship. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wise words from a wise man. Well written as always my friend. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Dance ...I would love too! Across a ballroom floor, ON a cruise, or a ship, Under the stars kissing the lips...!!!hehe! I think you need to go and read about you and Barbie on CGrims poem that he needed help on!  Loved your poem...You Romantic Devil you!! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
LOL... funny how i just wrote a poem with a similar title.. are you reading my mind or something? ROFL... can't stop... Anyway, this is great, Michael... you have a lot of wisdom, y'know? As always, your words ring true and your poetry fills me with delight. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
How true these words are! Beautifully written yet so sad. But next time you will know and not make the same mistakes again. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
With Baptist feet, I have no chance Of experiencing true romance How cruel is this circumstance That I - can't - dance! *G* Great poem and great message, Balladeer... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Baladeer...this is both perfect in its rhythm and rhyme and also in its subject matter. This is what true poetry is all about. Well done my friend |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Balladeer* I just posted "Like You Used To" and now I read this and all I can say is.....Exactly! This is a wonderful piece with all the answers anyone ever wanted about how to make love last. Of couse I knew the answers would come from you "oh wise one"....lol Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is darling Mike!!! I do so LOVE hearing a man admit to the things we tell them all the time!! Now that you know- you should be Mr. Cassanova, right??? lolOpen arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I hope I'm not to late to this dance to say how perfect this poem is... and I will say to you... what I say to sweet Sy ... when he too writes from the heart (as opposed to the funny bone) I LOVE WHEN YOU WRITE LIKE THIS!! wisdom in your words here sweet Balladeer. take care, jm |
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kristi Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 33Yulee, FL |
I absolutely loved this poem. You are a wonderful writer. I think I will have to make sure that my man reads this one! Two men look through the same bars. One sees the mud, and one the stars.-? |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Liz...yep, just a poem James...and you do the same (as long as we're not talking about the same one! )Marge..If a piper tried to pick her He would need a lot of liquor Cause to pick her from a poet Means he better be much slicker! Marilyn...I thank you, dear...and wonderful to see you again! Romantic Heart...hmmm..romantic heart and romantic devil. What a combination! Doreen...yep, I've been reading your mind and OH, YOU GIRL!!! Thank you. Your delight is my pleasure. WildChild...yes, but knowing and doing are two different things. I'll try...thank you. Suthern girl...of course you can dance! You just get too mad when somebody steps on your TOE! (great to see you again. Whereyoubeen?) Hoot..you have no idea how glad I am to see a post from you! Thank you for your words and for being back here with us. Butterflies..what a wonderful thing to say!! Unfortunately I am only Wise if you're referring to a potato chip! devina...LOL! Well, knowing and showing are two different things. After I wrote this poem, however, I did take down my sign which said "I love you. If this changes in the future you will be informed. Until that time, this statement shall remain valid and in force". Don't you think that was a good idea? Janet Marie....you are never too late. I would always save the last dance for you!! kristi..Thank you, friend. Yep, post it on the refrigerator. We need constant reminding, I'm afraid. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Its sad, that we don't learn these lessons, young. Never enough focus put into caring for our partner our love. Its should be a major subject in school... the art of Love. Nice read, its a real wakeup call. Parker |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I always enjoy your writing ... so well done ... always packing a punch ... I too don't have the time and energy to reply to all that I read ... I find myself sacrificing sleep, just to write poems to post ... you're an amazing writer ... I don't think I miss much of anything you write, even if I don't reply to all, know that it's because I try to reply to those who have had very few replies ... |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like it, I like it... and it's never too late for a good waltz, is it?? |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful and flowing poem! I've watched your writings from a'far Baladeer, and have only recently begun to comment and post. I must say ... I enjoyed this poem tremendously. Words to live by .. now if we could only "undo" and turn back time. Beautifully written! /Kit McCallum |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It is so important to continue to do all those little things that we did when we were first dating, at least once in awhile, to keep the romance alive. Great poem, as usual, Balladeer! Denise |
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