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The Soldier

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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 04-26-2000 03:02 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

The Soldier
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He lay in a pool of blood,
Soaked in his vanquished soul,
This blood that he hath shed,
Leads him away from his goal.

The defeated soldier of misfortune,
The vanished smile on his face,
He feels so much out of tune,
He knows he hath lost in the race.

Is this what he fought for?
For personal glory and vindication,
With anxiety and shallow reason,
He hath committed high treason (with life).

The slain soldier is battling still,
Defeated by another soldier once,
Yet, twice defeated by life,
What can he do but welcome death in strife!

Where does all this lead?
To death and much beyond,
Wish his body were never found,
With his head staring from the ground.

He lay in a pool of blood,
Soaked in his vanquished soul,
This blood that he hath shed,
Leads him away from his goal.

He went there to kill,
To fight and blood to spill,
Never did it occur to him,
Who died was he, blood that spilled was his!



 Take each day as it comes,
Consider each day as a flight,
Try hard to succeed and fly,
Surely then you will reach some height.

But if by some chance you don’t,
Remember that tomorrow will always come.
Learn this well and learn this hard
That today’s efforts will pay for tomorrow’s fun.

A Crazy Monster, a.k.a Ski
© Copyright 2000 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-26-2000 06:23 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I enjoyed reading this poem...it really captures the heartbreak and the loneliness of a dying soldier as his life ends.   James

[This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 05-30-2000).]
Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 05-05-2000 02:41 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Thanks for your supporting words, James

 In any moment of decision,
The best thing you can do is the right thing,
The next-best thing is the wrong thing,
And the worst thing you can do is nothing.
- Theodore Roosevelt
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3 posted 05-05-2000 02:49 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Very interesting point of view (dying soldier) very vivid and thought provoking...(to me anyway)
Great read

All my love,
Jeffrey

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but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
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4 posted 05-05-2000 02:50 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh my,now, where did this come from?  Well done, Sir!
Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 05-06-2000 09:25 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Jeffery,
Thanks a lot for your encouragement.

Sunshine,
It was just one of those days when there was a war raging in Eastern Europe, and another one inside my head...memories of books and tales of the WW I and II came back, and the result was this one....
Thanks for your words

Regards,
Sudhir

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6 posted 05-29-2000 12:58 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

I bring this up for the feelings being spread around about memorial day, a day when the courageous made sacrifices...

Regards, sudhir.

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
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7 posted 05-29-2000 04:05 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

I think it is important to be reminded that war is essentially about mass murder and not the up holding of a countries belief system.

The defeated soldier of misfortune,
The vanished smile on his face,
He feels so much out of tune,
He knows he hath lost in the race.

Is this what he fought for?
For personal glory and vindication,
With anxiety and shallow reason,
He hath committed high treason (with life).

The slain soldier is battling still,
Defeated by another soldier once,
Yet, twice defeated by life,
What can he do but welcome death in strife!

a powerful poem. One day may man lay down his weapons and learn to live in peace, though I live in hope part of me believes
that one of man's instincts to destroy.


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"Here chewing your tail is joy"

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Baltimore Grotto

"Do not listen to a word I say
Just listen to what I can keep silent"

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Marina
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8 posted 05-29-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Sad but wonderfully written.  Thanks for sharing.

Marina
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 05-29-2000 09:05 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

A very powerful piece, Sudhir.
You seem to put your whole self into everything you write, as though each poem were a testament of your beliefs. So that I not only read your work, but I feel it. Each one certainly does shout your spirit. I wonder if others feel the same. This is a wonderful quality
Liz
Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 05-30-2000 05:21 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Brian,
in your way of seeing things, it is perfect to assume that the war is about mass murders, it is true, and a sad one at that...

Thanks for reading...

Marina,
Thanks for reading...

Liz,
I am truly honoured that you feel the poems that I write to that extent... I try to be the character and then the actor, and the narrator at the same time, some times I get confused,not realising what I am at a point in time, they become my 'blocking' days...
I really apreciate each word that you say and for all the kindness showered in lavish praise...

Regards,
sudhir

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
JamesMichael
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11 posted 05-30-2000 06:48 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Sudhir thank you for having a soft heart and thinking about the feelings of soldiers.  Though they are called upon to fight and die
they still have hearts that break and tears to cry.    James
Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 05-30-2000 10:49 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

James,
Thanks for reading this one a second time.

Regards,
Sudhir
 
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