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The Soldier
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The Soldier |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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The Soldier ~~~~~~~~~~~ He lay in a pool of blood, Soaked in his vanquished soul, This blood that he hath shed, Leads him away from his goal. The defeated soldier of misfortune, The vanished smile on his face, He feels so much out of tune, He knows he hath lost in the race. Is this what he fought for? For personal glory and vindication, With anxiety and shallow reason, He hath committed high treason (with life). The slain soldier is battling still, Defeated by another soldier once, Yet, twice defeated by life, What can he do but welcome death in strife! Where does all this lead? To death and much beyond, Wish his body were never found, With his head staring from the ground. He lay in a pool of blood, Soaked in his vanquished soul, This blood that he hath shed, Leads him away from his goal. He went there to kill, To fight and blood to spill, Never did it occur to him, Who died was he, blood that spilled was his! Take each day as it comes, Consider each day as a flight, Try hard to succeed and fly, Surely then you will reach some height. But if by some chance you don’t, Remember that tomorrow will always come. Learn this well and learn this hard That today’s efforts will pay for tomorrow’s fun. A Crazy Monster, a.k.a Ski |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this poem...it really captures the heartbreak and the loneliness of a dying soldier as his life ends. James [This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 05-30-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks for your supporting words, James In any moment of decision, The best thing you can do is the right thing, The next-best thing is the wrong thing, And the worst thing you can do is nothing. - Theodore Roosevelt |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Very interesting point of view (dying soldier) very vivid and thought provoking...(to me anyway) Great read All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh my,now, where did this come from? Well done, Sir! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jeffery, Thanks a lot for your encouragement. Sunshine, It was just one of those days when there was a war raging in Eastern Europe, and another one inside my head...memories of books and tales of the WW I and II came back, and the result was this one.... Thanks for your words Regards, Sudhir |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I bring this up for the feelings being spread around about memorial day, a day when the courageous made sacrifices... Regards, sudhir. Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I think it is important to be reminded that war is essentially about mass murder and not the up holding of a countries belief system. The defeated soldier of misfortune, The vanished smile on his face, He feels so much out of tune, He knows he hath lost in the race. Is this what he fought for? For personal glory and vindication, With anxiety and shallow reason, He hath committed high treason (with life). The slain soldier is battling still, Defeated by another soldier once, Yet, twice defeated by life, What can he do but welcome death in strife! a powerful poem. One day may man lay down his weapons and learn to live in peace, though I live in hope part of me believes that one of man's instincts to destroy. ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Do not listen to a word I say Just listen to what I can keep silent" Nicky Wire |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sad but wonderfully written. Thanks for sharing. Marina |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A very powerful piece, Sudhir. You seem to put your whole self into everything you write, as though each poem were a testament of your beliefs. So that I not only read your work, but I feel it. Each one certainly does shout your spirit. I wonder if others feel the same. This is a wonderful quality Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Brian, in your way of seeing things, it is perfect to assume that the war is about mass murders, it is true, and a sad one at that... Thanks for reading... Marina, Thanks for reading... Liz, I am truly honoured that you feel the poems that I write to that extent... I try to be the character and then the actor, and the narrator at the same time, some times I get confused,not realising what I am at a point in time, they become my 'blocking' days... I really apreciate each word that you say and for all the kindness showered in lavish praise... Regards, sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sudhir thank you for having a soft heart and thinking about the feelings of soldiers. Though they are called upon to fight and die they still have hearts that break and tears to cry. James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
James, Thanks for reading this one a second time. Regards, Sudhir |
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