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7
Member

since 2000-04-26

Posts 113
Amherst, MA, USA

0 posted 2000-04-26 02:41 PM

it burns like the sun
a fearful threat you’ve
tried to resist
and hide from its
ambiguity
it can sting
and may ruin you in
the end
but what bliss
to remember the
sting of the sun’s kiss
and to know that it has
managed to
break through

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-04-26 02:54 PM

Welcome to Passions, 7! Great poem! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise

mariee66
Senior Member

since 2000-01-30

Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind

2 posted 2000-04-26 02:58 PM

Great Entrance!
Welcome!
Marie~

"Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

3 posted 2000-04-26 03:02 PM

Very cool, Welcome..... 7

Parker

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

4 posted 2000-04-26 09:56 PM

Hi 7,

Welcome to passions
This is very nice, look forward to more of your work.

Cerenity

Jeffrey Carter

Member Elite

since 2000-04-08

Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!

5 posted 2000-04-26 10:01 PM

HI! 7? Now that's original. I like it.

Welcome to passions. Great poem.

All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

7
Member

since 2000-04-26

Posts 113
Amherst, MA, USA

6 posted 2000-04-26 10:30 PM

thank you all. i feel very welcome.

7

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

7 posted 2000-04-26 10:43 PM

Welcome to Passions! I loved this poem, only I would arrange it a bit differently.
I hope you don't mind if I make a suggestion.

It burns like the sun,
a fearful threat
you’ve tried to resist,
and hide from its ambiguity,
it can sting,
and may ruin you in the end,
but what bliss to remember
the sting of the sun’s kiss
and to know that it has
managed to break through.

Just a suggestion.

corinne

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