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Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
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state of confusion

0 posted 2000-04-26 12:15 PM


Tightly tie and bundle
untidy loose ends
precariously
dangling

Dangerously
Close
To
F
  A
    L
       L
          I
            N
              G

Apart


Scattered debris
gathering dust
metallic rusting

oh

where is
an oil can
when you need one?

(c) 2000 CM Bailey

[This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 04-26-2000).]

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Denise
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1 posted 2000-04-26 12:22 PM


Indeed! Where is that darned oil can...it always seems to be missing! Great poem, Corinne!

Denise

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
2 posted 2000-04-26 12:41 PM


be sure the oil is environmentally friendly
before you squirt it

Rex}>{{{{o>

Martie
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California
3 posted 2000-04-26 01:45 PM


Where indeed?  Interesting poem, Corinne.
Corinne
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state of confusion
4 posted 2000-04-26 04:40 PM


LOL - this is my attempt at metaphorically capturing the essence of needing to be rescued.

Thanks, Denise, Rex and Martie.

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