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Brandyn Sand
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since 2000-04-21
Posts 82
Columbia, SC

0 posted 2000-04-26 08:40 AM


Counterfeit Phantom sealed in dreams
Turns a blind eye to sorrowful schemes

Work with your hands to polish the trust
Take all you can, become what you must

Your love is illusion shared with a crowd
One bloodied heart beneath a white shroud

One more, one less, what does it matter?
One way or another the future will shatter

Make your excuses, deny what is true,
No one must ever hold sway over you

Counterfeit Phantom how hard you will fall
For life without love is no life at all


© Brandyn Sand 4/99



 

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netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
1 posted 2000-04-26 09:34 AM


Brandyn you are right about life without
love is no love at all.  Great ending.

"Your love is illusion shared with a crowd
One bloodied heart beneath a white shroud"

I particulary like these two lines

netswan

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-04-26 11:56 AM


Excellent poem, Brandyn. Very well expressed!

Denise

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