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In reply to "The Patchwork Coat" by PdV

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Alicat
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0 posted 04-26-2000 05:24 AM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alicat

Seeking around, no job to be found, I happened upon that place
No job I found, though I sought around, but met a kindred face
Her skin was worn, her clothes were torn, and I caught her eye
My jeans were torn, my coat was worn, as I stettled down with a sigh
Beneath the stairs, blind to stares, I asked her of her coat
And blind to stares, under the stairs, she told me, rote by rote
What she had lost was beyond all cost, as we sat beneath the stairs
And out slipped a tear, the first in a year, oblivious to the stares
I made a vow that I'd help somehow, and left with purpose anew
And though I found work, despite back's quirk, she died with the dew
At the grave site, the sun shining bright, I was the only bloke
Noone was there, none seemed to care of the lady in the patchwork coat


Alicat


[This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 04-26-2000).]
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A Romantic Heart
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1 posted 04-26-2000 05:32 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Sad but beautiful story!!!
Nan
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2 posted 04-26-2000 07:44 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Very nicely done, persnikitty... Each and every homeless person has a unique story to tell... Each and every one of us "more lucky ones" should listen to them...
Poet deVine
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3 posted 04-26-2000 09:37 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Thank you for your wonderful reply poem. I do see that my "patchwork lady" could end up like this....I'm glad the poem inspired you....perhaps we can collaborate again soon!  
wayoutwalt
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4 posted 04-26-2000 10:10 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

its alicaterrific yuh twist is always welcome
WhtDove
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5 posted 04-26-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Ali you've left me speechless! Sad, sad, sad...
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6 posted 04-26-2000 11:03 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent poem in reponse, Ali. Very sad.

Denise
Alicat
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7 posted 04-26-2000 01:19 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Everybody, thank you for your kind words.  And a special thanks to Poet deVine, who's writings have inspired me on several occasions.

And having read the replies to 'The Patchwork Coat', I can extremely relate...as I may be joining those nameless ranks here within the next month if things don't turn around for me...but, if they don't, I know that it will be a wonderous adventure, if nothing else.


Alicat

And PdV, yeah, I agree...we need to do another collaboration, as we have a good rapport with bouncing ideas off each other.
Martie
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8 posted 04-26-2000 01:42 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

A well done and thoughtful poem!
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...nice
 
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