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brandondinsmore
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since 1999-10-27
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0 posted 2000-04-25 09:18 AM


the days I dread pass
quickly enough for
the days I love
to drift by

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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1 posted 2000-04-25 09:33 AM


much truth spoken here in so few perfect words...
I like the sweet simplicity of this poem...
yes, the harder times are softened by
the times we find contentment.
nice work,enjoyed this piece.
jm


 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



WolfsMate
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 121
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2 posted 2000-04-25 02:15 PM


Short but very effective. Well done!

 "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near"

Beki
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since 1999-09-15
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Newport Beach, CA, USA
3 posted 2000-04-25 02:16 PM


sweetly succinct  
Martie
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4 posted 2000-04-25 02:20 PM


Well done!  Wish those sweet days would last a little longer, though.
Meadowmuse
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5 posted 2000-04-25 04:30 PM


Well put.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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