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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2000-04-25 08:17 AM


The Dream

Once upon a lonely night
In glow of full moon’s silky white
I sat in trembling fear of fright
Of what would come to be

I glanced at luna’s halo rim
In pondering memories of him
And in the midnight shadows dim
I felt him close to me

The moon was restless with my fears
Kaleidoscoping through my tears
As I recalled the numbered years
Of sorrow dealt to me

How can this be, awake from dream
More true to real than it would seem
My heart would laugh, but soul would deem
It just a fantasy

A dream, and yet a vision real
With all the feelings I conceal
And now awake I still can feel
The power of the dream

A quivering ring pierced through the night
My heart danced wildly in fright
The moon persistently cast light
On this peculiar scene

Who would call at midnight hour
As bells chimed from the hill top tower
Had God bestowed through dream the power
This beckoning voice foresee

I raised the phone to hesitant ear
Still trembling in my midnight fear
And in my head would solemn hear
The voice from out my dream

His sound like angel song became  
Out of the past spoke soft my name
And all the fears were quickly tamed
As he reached out to me

Has God bestowed me life once more
And joys my heart had known before
Will I reach one more glimmering shore
As he comes back to me

I looked up at the smiling moon
The glowing beams tried to consume
It’s light with pleasure filled my room
As he spoke soft to me

I told him of the best of life
And hid the worst of sorrow's strife
And laughed with him at twists in life
In all my ecstasy  

Then love still beating from within
My heart confessed my love to him
As sun was born of luna’s rim
And woke me from my dream

Elizabeth Santos





[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 04-26-2000).]

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-04-25 09:22 AM


I looked up at the smiling moon
The glowing beams tried to consume
It’s light with pleasure filled my room
As he spoke soft to me

I told him of the best of life
And hid the worst of sorrow's strife
And laughed with him at twists in life
In all my ecstasy  

Then love still beating from within
My heart confessed my love to him
As sun became the luna’s rim
And woke me from my dream
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Liz... this is absolutely EXQUISITE!!
the beauty of this poem takes me in...
and while the visual imagery is perfect as always,
it is the emotional imagery that is so apparent...they rise off the page as the reader rides along this poem.
very strong written expression in this piece.
take care my poetic friend,
jm


Martie
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2 posted 2000-04-25 11:33 AM


Liz...what a wonderful poem--and how sweet can be a much loved voice on the telephone, even in a dream.
doreen peri
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3 posted 2000-04-25 11:40 AM


If only reality were so sweet... lovely, Liz... really lovely!
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4 posted 2000-04-25 12:23 PM


Liz, I know a lot about dreaming about love, and this touched me deeply. Great job.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2000-04-25 12:54 PM


Elizabeth,
Only the truth could be this exquisite. Love Sy

Beki
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6 posted 2000-04-25 01:21 PM


What a sweet and tender poem my friend....that we all could have such dreams  
ESP
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7 posted 2000-04-25 01:27 PM


What a beautiful dream....your words enchanted me yet again!! Lovely!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

TerryW
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8 posted 2000-04-25 01:40 PM


Liz,
     You have enchanted me too, dear!   I love this one.    Thank you -- you made my day!

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

poetFemmeFatale
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9 posted 2000-04-25 02:29 PM


This whole thing was breathtaking...it was as if I was holding my breath for the next line!  Fabulous read lady, as always!  Was only a dream though?    Next time don't set your alarm so early!  LOL  
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 2000-04-25 05:46 PM


Janet Marie,
So beautiful a response, I don't know how to respond! Except to thank you for your kind remarks. I think you make us all feel good with your loving words to all.
Thank you

Martie,
I wish I did have dreams like this, but this was from my imagination, and considering I don't have much of one, it didn't come out too bad
Thanks, dear

Doreen, Wouldn't it be great? Thank you so much for reading so many of my poems. I appreciate your remarks

Lovebug, I know that you know, and I always enjoy your input. Did you ever have a dream and then, half awake, finish it off the way you wanted it to come out?
Thank you, sweetie

Sy,
This never happened, only the feeling of it.
Thank you for the comment from one who knows

Beki,
I also wish I could have a dream like this.
Thank you for you kind remarks

Lizzie, I love the word "enchant", and if it does that, then wow! You make me happy. Now tell me, do you know what a lilac is?

Terry,
It is you who made my day with that second "enchant"
Thank you

Poet Femme,
Thank you for that very nice compliment, I'm glad you enjoyed reading this

Liz


mariee66
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11 posted 2000-04-25 05:58 PM


This was very enchanting, indeed~
Beautiful verse~
Marie~

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12 posted 2000-04-25 06:12 PM


I lie awake in a world filled with dreams
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

This is beautiful Liz.

All my love,
Jeffrey

Franni
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13 posted 2000-04-25 06:14 PM


Liz,  This poem perhaps has even deeper meanings than on the surface.  It really was beautifully written and again a wonderful legacy to leave to your children.  I felt like I was there in the dream.

Love,
Franni


Parker
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14 posted 2000-04-25 06:18 PM


You sure captivated me here liz, You sure can weave the magic in a poem.

Parker

Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 2000-04-25 07:24 PM


Marie,
Wow! A third "enchanting". Thank you!

Jeffery,
Ah, yes, Dreams can seem very real. Thank you for your nice comments on this one

Franni, Thank you so much,  what sweet comments, and again, it's so nice to see you on the forum

Parker,
So glad you enjoyed this

Liz

Meadowmuse
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16 posted 2000-04-25 09:52 PM


Just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed this as well, Liz. I kept thinking about "A Midsummer Night's Dream" while reading it, though your poetic gifting is a treasure far in and of its own. Lovely words, thoughts, images.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

lucky
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17 posted 2000-04-25 11:28 PM


WOW...!!!

What a cruise... I hope your not booked up! I realllllly love this place. I hear so much about "Heartbreak Hotel" these daz but this one has a nice story to tell.

Really great Lis

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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18 posted 2000-04-26 12:03 PM


What a lovely, wistful poem!  Meticulously worded, with a rhythm and rhyme to stay, singing in one's mind.  What a wonderful love story!  I've got to keep this one, to enjoy again and again!

Elizabeth Santos
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Pennsylvania
19 posted 2000-04-26 02:23 AM


Claire,
Your remarks warm my heart. Thank you

Lucky,
I'm glad you enjoyed the tour through my imagination
Thanks

Rosemary,
If you keep a poem, I know it's because of the love in your heart and I am honored
Thank you so much

Liz

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