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* The Legend: Ghost of the Tranquil Seas...
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* The Legend: Ghost of the Tranquil Seas... |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~ The Legend: Ghost of the Tranquil Seas ~ The Story Goes... ~~~~~~~ Once a lonely maiden fair believed that she could fly - Stepped off the cliff, fell to the sea, now hear her ghostly cry... She walked the ledge for many years her cries upon the breeze - Some have claimed they've seen her ghost drifting 'cross the Seas... Legend tells, there was a man somewhere who held the key - Who, if he fell in love, would release her from the sea. His love would give her life again no more there, would she roam - Where upon the cliffs of hell in death, became her home... So every night she waited, listening for a horse's breath - For hooves which carried such a man whose love would mend her death. And every man who passed, she approached him oh so fair - With ghostly eyes so lovingly spoke, "Love me if you dare..." The men would ride off terrified into the dark of night - and leave her kneeling there in tears, trembling in moonlight... One night though - a different sound fell clearly on her ear - The sound of hoofbeat strong & sure approached her, ever near... Her many tears had made her blind his face, she could not see - She simply stood there reaching out, - so angelically... Her gown & hair blew round her in a wisp of ghostly white - His gentle voice said, "Look at me..." unaware, she'd lost her sight. She turned her eyes toward him, and he looked within them deep - He saw her soul, transparently and there began to weep... He'd traveled many years searching for her spirit lost - Determined he would find her, no matter what the cost. She was his maiden fair a pure reflection of his soul - Her eyes a mirror to his own, her essence made him whole. He helped her step down from the ledge and stood in breathless awe - He brushed her hair back from her face, amazed by what he saw... Her ghostly features now had life her empty eyes found sight - A starlit smile graced her lips, he fell in love that night... The story goes, they never parted - you no longer hear her cries... Instead there on the Sea's below, you hear angelic sighs... Sighs of sweet contentment laced with sighs of ecstasy - Two lovers swimming in their Sea of pure tranquility... ~~~~~~~~ -poetFemmeFatale April 24, 2000 |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Gen, If you keep writing this well someone is going to steal your talent away from us and put it into print. This is simply awe inspiring. All my love, Jeffrey |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Thank you dear Jeffrey for taking the time to read it - I know it's awfully long, but there was just no way to condense it!  I'm hoping folks don't get discouraged, and quit reading before reaching the end! LOL Your comments always mean the world...thank you for such support! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is my last post before I exit and boy am I glad it was this one. The title drew me in and the poem was more than I expected, it was soo beautiful and visual  I loved it, very well written. Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
This one is my favorite! I loved it such creativity!! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Femme, This is excellent, I love it. It flows with talent and has a magic way of making one feel peaceful. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
There is an old saying that ghosts are the regrets of living men...perhaps that holds true in that ghosts follow us throughout our lives. I too have regrets of things I did or did not do, but without them I wouldn't be here, now would I? Sorry if this rambles but I just got to work and I'm still asleep... Beautiful poem, sis. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) You captivated my imagination till the very end...a beautiful tale!! You have a rare and fine gift of weave...thank you for sharing it!! Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Gen, this is excellent and not too long at all... loved the imagery and darkness in this... and of course the happy ending...gotta have that right????*Smile* so very well written my poetic princess!! later sweet-Gen-Gator jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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TheBlindMan Junior Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 20Cape Cod, MA |
I became part of this story as it rang so familiar. Thank you for releasing my soul to become a part of it. Your talent touches. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Tracie66 - - Very honored to be your last read of the night...May all your dreams come true if you're heading off to bed!  A Romantic Heart - - *curtsies* to the nice romantic lady herself! hehe Thank you for reading and enjoying! Lost Dreamer - - I too found peace in it....Thank you my dear. Robert - - Glad you enjoyed it bro! How was your weekend with the folks, BTW? hehe I'll bet.....  Butterflies_don't_cry - - I've taken a very different turn of late with my poetry. Indeed, I have been attempting to "weave" a tale into them. I think I like my writing better that way. Thank you for noticing the changes! I feel I am finally challenging myself more, and am producing far better quality this way.Janet - - Glad you liked! You don't think it's too long? It's probably the longest I've written yet, short of a funny I did in Adult a long time ago.  I'll miss you while I'm away! Take care of you, ok?The BlindMan - - I'm so glad you journeyed with me into this one. I'm hoping many more do too. 'Twas a happy journey, I hope? Thank you sir. |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Man, to only have a story teller as good as you as a child... how do you do that? I wish I had your imagination and creativity. =) This was beautiful. When you described her kneeling and tremibling in tears it all became clear as day... wow. Yes, 'tis an honor to know such a great story teller. Even if only through a message board. TOO LONG!? Not this one... hell.. I'm not sure how you could have made it any better, but I'm hungry for more. It's not long enough! =) Guess I should get back to work huh? [sigh] I'm coming down with a cold or something too...  blah. Talk to ya later."Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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galaxy84 Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 18Pa, USA |
wonderful poem. you paint such a beautiful picture. i can almost see the story come to life. galaxy84 |
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Brent Hotchkin Junior Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 42Florida,USA |
My goodness Gen. I am taken in by every piece you have written. I know you haven't heard me reply lately. But I have read and reread and reread all of you poems from the last month or two. You have such a gift. You steel my imagination. Then inspiration fills my being. I can only hope to write as well as you. I love all your work. But with this one you have taken it to the next level. Your imagery. WOW !!! |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
This was a very engaging and haunting love story. I enjoyed it very much. David2 |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You write so good...I loved the story...so smooth and gentle. James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
You know Gen, if you're going to keep this up, you're going to make me and my fellow romantics look really bad!!! WOW!! I am just amazed. . . this poem is so lyrical and the images just so wonderful. . .I couldn't stop reading it. . . whoever this muse is, he's really got a good hold on you. . .don't let him go!!!! ------------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
WhiteNite - - You're so funny! I like how you just "ramble" in your comments...I can just see your little wheels turning! LOL Pssst, I've thought about doing some Part 2's to some of my most fav's....BTW, you take care of that cold, ok? galaxy84 - - Thank you & welcome to our forums! I've not seen you around before, but hope to see more of you soon! Enjoy your stay here! Brent - - You don't comment much, but I am always thrilled when you do. I had no idea you were "rereading" my works...(blushing) My imagination is your imagination, remember? I didn't steal it from you....promise.David2 - - Aaahh...you saw it as I wanted it to be...a haunting love story. Thank you so much! James - - Thank you sir...glad it was smooth! Something of this length is hard to keep that way, you know! LOL Sven - - I am going to keep this up! And about my muse? He does have a good hold on me, doesn't he? I hadn't realized that until you mentioned it.... I will hold on till my hands bleed, how's that? LOL Thank you sir.**I am graced by so many lovely comments on this piece...and I just can't say enough to let you all know how much your words of encouragement mean. I have changed my style, and I wasn't sure if it would go over. Seems the storytelling is okay with you then, 'eh? Love you all so much! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your style is lovely, and I am enjoying your talent as it continues to unfold in lovely grace. Well done, my dear. |
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Mitch B Junior Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 37Orlando, FL |
How wonderful... To live, to die, to live again!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Yes he does Gen. . . . I am so glad that you have found a new muse. . . but try not to hold on too tightly. . . And I can't wait to see what else he will inspire in you!! I always knew that you had this in you. . . and it's good to see it. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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