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John Yaws
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0 posted 2000-04-24 10:37 PM


I sit beside my fire today,
And think of yesteryear.
When you and I were young and gay-
And you were always near.

The plans we made, the vows we spake
That we would never keep-
The paths we took, the choices made,
The tears we both would weep.

The choices, aye; the lonely miles-
When we were not together,
The bridges burned, along with styles
The moaning winds, and weather.

The news I heard, of wedding vows-
My face now lined with care.
The blade of years has carved my brows
With wrinkles and to spare.

I love you still, or think I do-
That’s neither here, nor there..
It’s only fitting, win or lose?
To love a maiden fair.


© Copyright 2000 John R. Yaws - All Rights Reserved
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
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1 posted 2000-04-24 10:40 PM


This is AMAZING!!! You have dug deep and come up with something very beautiful G.S. I loved it!!


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.


Daysleeper
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since 2000-04-23
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2 posted 2000-04-24 10:43 PM


Gunslinger-

Oy! This is really good. I love how you use the 'cracker' phrases in your rhyming. Gives it a real 'country' feel.

...Daysleeper...


 "Presently I've had enough of all your sanity." -James Kavanaugh

Denise
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3 posted 2000-04-25 12:06 PM


This is very touching, very tender, Gunslinger. I love it!

Denise

Brandyn Sand
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4 posted 2000-04-26 08:19 AM


Here, you've eloquently touched on the axiom:  Tis better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all, GS.  And, once again, nicely done!

Sand


 

Jeffrey Carter
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5 posted 2000-04-26 09:38 AM


WOW!!
GS, Now that's beautiful writing...flows so effortlessly. Great job.

All my love,
Jeffrey

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
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6 posted 2000-04-27 09:01 AM


Hi Gunslinger,

This is wonderful, I love to hear people after so many years together still in love, its refreshing.

Thank you for sharing,

Cerenity

passing shadows
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7 posted 2004-05-13 03:28 AM


if you ever need anyone to sit by the fire with you, let me know
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