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Effigy
Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-04-24 07:05 PM


Come unto me a
and all is loss.
Come unto me
and bare my cross.
Cause i am nothing
and i am everything.
Cause i have nothing.
and i have everything.
i have every,
yes, everthing!

i control everything!
i screwed up everything!
i lost everything!
i gave you everything.
You've gotten my everything.

i'm left with nothing here.
i'm left with nothing there.
    left with nothing there.
    left  ith nothing ther
    left  it  no  ing  her
    le t  it  no       her
          it  no       he
          it  no.


 understanding is misunderstood


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netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
1 posted 2000-04-24 09:30 PM


Wow Effigy, what pain you express -
cool way to show it --

You are everything - and no matter who
hurts you - never forget it --)

netswan

forne_marin
Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina
2 posted 2004-04-16 12:00 PM


The descending line is the best part of the poem. It's very "e.e.cummings". I like it, but the beginning is a little confusing.
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