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You've Gotten My Everything

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Effigy
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since 04-11-2000
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0 posted 04-24-2000 07:05 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Effigy

Come unto me a
and all is loss.
Come unto me
and bare my cross.
Cause i am nothing
and i am everything.
Cause i have nothing.
and i have everything.
i have every,
yes, everthing!

i control everything!
i screwed up everything!
i lost everything!
i gave you everything.
You've gotten my everything.

i'm left with nothing here.
i'm left with nothing there.
    left with nothing there.
    left  ith nothing ther
    left  it  no  ing  her
    le t  it  no       her
          it  no       he
          it  no.


 understanding is misunderstood

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netswan
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since 03-28-2000
Posts 1395
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1 posted 04-24-2000 09:30 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Wow Effigy, what pain you express -
cool way to show it --

You are everything - and no matter who
hurts you - never forget it --)

netswan
forne_marin
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The descending line is the best part of the poem. It's very "e.e.cummings". I like it, but the beginning is a little confusing.
 
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