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First__Knight
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0 posted 04-24-2000 05:50 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for First__Knight

You In Me
~First Knight~


Without you close...
I am lost again.

I never know where to begin.

Feelings exploding,
deep inside.
Breathless
moments....
I must
confide.

I'm your sun....
Yes, I have heard you say.

Brightly shining on your darkest day.

But it's because
you burn so bright in me.
That I give back
the life you gave to me.

Because....
Losing you
is like losing me.

For....
utter darkness
is all....
I'll see.



 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


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ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....


1 posted 04-24-2000 06:16 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Lovely poem...totally "wow".

But it's because
you burn so bright in me.
That I give back
the life you gave to me.

Beautiful!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie




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netswan
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Because....
                                                    Losing you
                                                  is like losing me.

Wonderful poem so well written!

netswan
Meadowmuse
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3 posted 04-24-2000 06:49 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

First Knight...this piece has a delicate feel to it, and I love the title you've chosen. So nice to read...thank you.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau
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4 posted 04-24-2000 07:00 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

David~
So nice to see your romantic heart in here again from time to time.
This is a lovely poem you've done.
I feel like I've looked into your heart.
Thank you for the view.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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Butterflies_dont_cry
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This is excellent with deep emotion and pain showing through...

Because....
Losing you
is like losing me

This stanza especially ripped at my heart, I also noticed your "signature"....a man who has felt love...beautifully said.
**Angel Wing Hugs**


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

Denise
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6 posted 04-24-2000 10:22 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is a lovely, heartfelt piece, David!

Denise
JamesMichael
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7 posted 04-24-2000 05:42 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I know that once you experience love you never want to let go of that feeling..the feelings you have captured here..James
First__Knight
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8 posted 04-24-2000 11:58 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Truly am I honored at the response to this....My thanks to you all  

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


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9 posted 04-25-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

What beautiful sentiment there is in this piece. I can truly relate to it. My wife and children are my life.

All my love,
Jeffrey
First__Knight
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10 posted 04-25-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

I am glad you can relate Jeff...I only hope that one day I might have those things and can fully relate the way you do

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


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11 posted 04-25-2000 10:14 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

I love this piece... it's so powerful and so beautiful. Great job.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
First__Knight
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12 posted 04-30-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Why thank you love bug  

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


A.C.Turner
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13 posted 04-30-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for A.C.Turner   Email A.C.Turner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A.C.Turner

Beautiful rhyme. Wonderful emotion. Makes me wish I was in love again. Peace to you. ACT.
devina
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14 posted 05-01-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

*sigh*

This is beautiful David...connection is essential in love...and you've written it perfectly!!! Can I say AWE now? G*


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

TearsFromHeaven
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15 posted 05-01-2000 03:16 AM       View Profile for TearsFromHeaven   Email TearsFromHeaven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TearsFromHeaven

First_Knight,
     I can feel the emotion from your work.  These are very powerful words.  I can feel the strength of your poem.  Thank you for sharing.    

 Trust Instinct. Instinct will keep an animal alive, but Logic can kill a man.

Richard "Rickey" N. Boydstun, Jr.
First__Knight
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Thank you ACT

Always a kind word from the Lady Devina  

Thank you Tears from Heaven....I like your nic  

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


Cerenity
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17 posted 05-02-2000 08:52 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi First Knight,

This is beautiful, you have a way with words in this one my friend, enjoyed very mush.

Cerenity
First__Knight
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Thank you Cerenity :0

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


Tuck
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19 posted 05-04-2000 09:56 PM       View Profile for Tuck   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tuck

awww!  make me cry; this is beautiful!
Sven
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Excellent First Knight. . . this will truly gain you entrance into the Romantics Guild. . . such a tale of devotion and completion. . . two hearts. . . *sigh*

Superb!!

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Alwye
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Oh man..the "loosing you is like loosing me" line really got to me. I can relate so much to that.  Powerful, beautiful, heartwrenching this is....another masterpiece.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Lonliness is the human condition."
*Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"*
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