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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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You In Me ~First Knight~ Without you close... I am lost again. I never know where to begin. Feelings exploding, deep inside. Breathless moments.... I must confide. I'm your sun.... Yes, I have heard you say. Brightly shining on your darkest day. But it's because you burn so bright in me. That I give back the life you gave to me. Because.... Losing you is like losing me. For.... utter darkness is all.... I'll see. A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Lovely poem...totally "wow". But it's because you burn so bright in me. That I give back the life you gave to me. Beautiful!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Because.... Losing you is like losing me. Wonderful poem so well written! netswan |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
First Knight...this piece has a delicate feel to it, and I love the title you've chosen. So nice to read...thank you. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David~ So nice to see your romantic heart in here again from time to time. This is a lovely poem you've done. I feel like I've looked into your heart. Thank you for the view. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 This is excellent with deep emotion and pain showing through... Because.... Losing you is like losing me This stanza especially ripped at my heart, I also noticed your "signature"....a man who has felt love...beautifully said. **Angel Wing Hugs** Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a lovely, heartfelt piece, David! Denise |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know that once you experience love you never want to let go of that feeling..the feelings you have captured here..James |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Truly am I honored at the response to this....My thanks to you all A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
What beautiful sentiment there is in this piece. I can truly relate to it. My wife and children are my life. All my love, Jeffrey |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
I am glad you can relate Jeff...I only hope that one day I might have those things and can fully relate the way you do A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I love this piece... it's so powerful and so beautiful. Great job. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Why thank you love bug A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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A.C.Turner Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 83Reading, Pa.Home of Bardfest |
Beautiful rhyme. Wonderful emotion. Makes me wish I was in love again. Peace to you. ACT. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
*sigh* This is beautiful David...connection is essential in love...and you've written it perfectly!!! Can I say AWE now? G* Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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TearsFromHeaven Junior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 19Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
First_Knight, I can feel the emotion from your work. These are very powerful words. I can feel the strength of your poem. Thank you for sharing. Trust Instinct. Instinct will keep an animal alive, but Logic can kill a man. Richard "Rickey" N. Boydstun, Jr. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you ACT Always a kind word from the Lady Devina Thank you Tears from Heaven....I like your nic A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi First Knight, This is beautiful, you have a way with words in this one my friend, enjoyed very mush. Cerenity |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Cerenity :0 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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Tuck Junior Member
since 2000-04-29
Posts 27 |
awww! make me cry; this is beautiful! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent First Knight. . . this will truly gain you entrance into the Romantics Guild. . . such a tale of devotion and completion. . . two hearts. . . *sigh* Superb!! ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oh man..the "loosing you is like loosing me" line really got to me. I can relate so much to that. Powerful, beautiful, heartwrenching this is....another masterpiece. *Krista Knutson* "Lonliness is the human condition." *Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"* |
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