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Skyfyre
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0 posted 2000-04-24 12:45 PM


Whilst the Candle Burns

Oh come, my love, this mystic night
Upon enchanted wind
That surges swift through salten air
Above unquiet sea,
No hand shall stay thy fairie-flight --
Nor word this spell rescind
That marks thy locus starry there --
That carries you to me.

Oh come, for whilst the candle burns,
The charm is surely spun;
In silken ties two hearts shall bind
As single entity --
No prize but that for which it yearns
Might be so gladly won,
Such welcome shall the vessel find
That carries you to me!

Oh come, for time is doubly fleet
When need would wish it slow --
So short the blessed hour seems
That frames our destiny --
A kiss in parting bittersweet
By candle’s dying glow,
Laments the transience of dreams
That carry you to me.



 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


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Denise
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1 posted 2000-04-24 12:47 PM


Another excellent poem, Kess! I envy your talent!

Denise

netswan
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2 posted 2000-04-24 12:57 PM


Simply lovely and well done

netswan

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3 posted 2000-04-24 01:05 AM


Skyfyre~
Pleasant read.

'Oh come, for time is doubly fleet
When need would wish it slow --'

Just a beautiful line.
~*Marge*~



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Michael
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4 posted 2000-04-24 01:12 AM


Ah, the fragrence of impending doom upon dreams not yet realized.  Waves of rich melancholy flowing in this one, Kess.

"So short the blessed hour seems
That frames our destiny --"

Penned perfectly.

Michael

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5 posted 2000-04-24 02:17 AM


SkyFyre~
Wonderful read  
Enjoyed it    
Tracie~


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Anne Rooks


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6 posted 2000-04-24 10:06 PM


I feel as though I should be reading this with the sound of a lute in the background..very nice...I love your poetry, Kess.  
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7 posted 2000-04-24 10:14 PM


Kess,
     I want to know where all of this is coming from. . . you have found a wonderful muse I feel. . . it shows in this poem, excellent words my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Mike
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8 posted 2000-04-24 10:16 PM


Beautifully written.
Christopher
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9 posted 2000-04-25 01:44 AM


"transience of dreams"

Indeed my friend, (not lecturing, just speaking out loud...LOL) Dreams, aren't they the most interesting of subjects? Is it perhaps that very transience which draws us to them? Pictures and hopes caught in fleeting moments of un-awareness, with wisp of wishes trailing after throughout the days. Hmm, I've oft wished to remember my dreams as others do... yet theirs are just as transient, mine just move quicker!

Beki
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10 posted 2000-04-25 02:09 AM


Extraordinary work, Kess....Bravo!
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11 posted 2000-04-25 02:28 AM


There is little I can add that hasn't already been said. I enjoyed!  

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien

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