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~Only The Stars See Me Cry~ ..... TY added
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~Only The Stars See Me Cry~ ..... TY added |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A warm breeze is all that holds me on this empty, long, night, embraced only by the cloud's shadows, feeling a deep need to write. A thousand stars dance above me, as does a celestial blue moon, their presence, my quiet comfort, but like you...they will be gone too soon. I wonder what you are doing, who your with and where you are, I'd sell my soul to know ... we were both wishing on the same star. I was only looking for a little peace ... for something kind ... and for just a little while, I believed ... you were that find. I brought this on myself ... falling for my own fantasy, now my heart breaks under the sudden weight of this cold reality. I cant hold you to promises that you never made, yet each passing second I find more of me that I'm willing to trade. I don't wanna be like this anymore ... so emotional, needy and weak, where am I supposed to go with this, you were the quiet comfort I seek. I tried so hard to hold you, to make you want to stay ... how poetically ironic the intensity of my need is what scared you away. Alone again, I sit and hurt and wonder why ... and I cry a tear ... for every star I see in the sky. Only the moon sees me, he seems to understand, come morn the sun will find me still here ... heart in my hand. Janet Marie < !signature--> Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 04-24-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Alone again, I sit and hurt and wonder why ... and I cry a tear ... for every star I see in the sky. Only the moon sees me, he seems to understand, come morn the sun will find me still here ... heart in my hand. ***************************** Janet, What an emotional piece. This really brings back memories for me. It actually led me to write something. I'll let you know when I post it. Well it's posted. It's called "Questions" All my love, Jeffrey [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 04-23-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet this is really lovely. I too feel like I am too emotional, needy, and weak. I don't completely understand why I am like that. A friend of mine recently broke off our relationship because I couldn't stop myself from falling in love with her and she only wanted to be my friend. Not my friend here...a friend in Canada. Somehow I believe when I find the right woman she will not care if I am needy..but I also believe I may be wrong and I need to settle this needy issue before I can find the right woman. Anyway I fall in love all the time and as I was telling my friend Lena tonight...I said "Lena...I think I'm falling in love with you...but I don't know if you're falling in love with me." It seems like I am too needy to even talk to her this way..I wish I could be strong and wait for her to say she loves me without any encouragement. Anyway watch them needy poems. James |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a beautiful poem....I am also emotionally needy, I thrive on caring for people and having people care about me. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem with us. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janet Marie~ This is a poem thats touches my very soul, so sad and lonely this makes me feel  HUG Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
BIG HUGS!!!!! Marina |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh Janet, I am so glad I didn't miss this one...It's like I was reading my own heart. You sure expressed that hopeful longing - and believe me, I know all too well, how it feels to try and hang on to that fantasy you speak of. When you find someone who seems to "light up your life", I think it's natural to want to hold onto them forever...And as I see it, they always will, if even from a distance, like the stars up in the sky...Even though your star is not in your hand, doesn't mean he still won't shine down on you from time to time. I just like to consider myself lucky for even SEEING them in the first place....it gives me hope. Smile girl...I'm here if you need to talk, ok? Love you! Did I say this was breathtakingly beautiful?? It is... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jan- This was ahhh words escape me. This was simply beautiful yet hauntingly sad. It broke my heart as I read it. It was like you were mirroring the very feelings of my own heart. I am glad that you can write this out though. Like you are always telling me...write through it. If I had one wish, it would be that you were happy. I'd do anything to see the sparkle again that I know you possess. I hope things get better. You know where I'm at if you need to talk. Love always, Amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
This is so sad~ I know the emotions expressed all too well~ Letting go and finding strength and faith can be so hard~ Great job JM~ Marie~ |
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brandondinsmore Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 142OKC, OK |
I thought that I replied to this much earlier...I love it. It is great, especially the scheme of it all. What inspired you? Keep this one going! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very poignant, JM! Sometimes we feel pain in order to move on to the next phase of love. Corinne |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Janet, you're exploring your feelings in such beauty and poetic fashion here. You know, any effort to get closer to the inside of "why" you're hurting can potentially enable you with that much more power to deal with the pain. "Knowledge is power" goes the old adage. Oft'times in the process of exploring our issues, we are able to find the "why" and the "now what." To my way of thinking, you're "dealing and healing" all at the same time, which is so often the way it goes. Hang in there, do write, and you will find yourself coming to a peaceful place. (((you))) ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
Well this one touched me too..I think when it comes to someone we love we are all a little needy. Just some of us like to pretend that we are not I esp loved the stars in the sky imagery"Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time that you've never had it before." ~author unknown~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) J.M.** Somehow I knew this would hurt and would be another mirror...it is but I hurt for you at the moment now and not for my own memories. This is heart wrenching and so very powerful. You are NOT needy and weak...it's NOT wrong to need someone and to love them with all that you have...it's the way we are made to love, but that also means that we hurt deeper when it goes. **Angel wing Hugs and Butterfly Kisses** my S.S. Take care of you!! Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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brandondinsmore Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 142OKC, OK |
I read this one yesterday, I swear, and I still love it. You are a great conveyer. |
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Puckie New Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 5London UK |
Such feeling in your words. Powerful conveyance of emotion. I love it. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, you've expressed emotions in such poetic terms. Its always saddens me to watch this process, probably because I've been there a few times. Hugs my friend. Parker |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Only the stars see me cry... What an intriguing title. Ever think someone is scared by the intensity of THEIR feelings and thats why they run? Just a thought. ~Cuddlez~ Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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sweetchild Junior Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 37 |
WOW!! This was so powerfully moving. I'm really blessed to have read this! Great job. I long to be able to express my feelings in such a beutiful way as this. |
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sweetchild Junior Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 37 |
WOW!! This was so powerfully moving. I'm really blessed to have read this! Great job. I long to be able to express my feelings in such a beutiful way as this. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
JM, believe you scored a "10" with this one. BEH A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Your pain is evident in your words, Janet Marie. Very well expressed. Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I truly have NO real words to say thank you for these HEARTFELT replies ... For ALL of your glowing encouragement of my writing I am humbled and graced...It is by your kind words that I continue to grow as poet. How does one adequately say thanks for that kind of a gift. For all who offer hugs and understanding and were SO sweet to offer a shoulder to cry on I am SO TOUCHED... You ALL inspire me beyond words. THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH with love and respect, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Call it a wild guess, Janet, but I'd say you have a hit here....and deservedly so. You are indeed growing in leaps and bounds as an excellent writer. I applaud your efforts. |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
JM, deeply painful, melancholy, and beautiful...I can relate to this so much that it's rather frightening. You've brought tears to my eyes with your stunning words and talent. *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Janet, The TY should go to you my friend for through your writing we get our inspiration. All my love, Jeffrey |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Stars and Angels, they see all. Great work, as usual. Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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Go0fYdUcK Junior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 28CA |
i so truly can relate to your poem...you did one hell of a job! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Janet, I can't help myself sometimes I come on line and browse thru many a beautiful poem and yet I shy from comment. This one I just want to say to you .. I adore it Coco |
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