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TheBlindMan
Junior Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 20
Cape Cod, MA

0 posted 2000-04-22 11:21 AM


The image of you loving me
was something very new
I did not even recognize
what it was giving you

Your love and all you gave me
through my fortress strong and tall
started cracks and rumblings
that made bricks begin to fall

But, then in my blinded state
you suffered pain and need
I made your life a misery
with my words and lack of deed

In time you gave up every hope
of entering my heart
but, you could never ever know
your effect on every part

My heart now has a brand new look
but one that is not better
for it can only show you love
in words put in a letter

Your warm embrace and loving eyze
that rescued me from obscurity
are now closed up and turned away
and seeking a new security

If only I and all I am
could find the words to say
To open up your heart to me
and this time let me stay

There is no rarer or more fulfilling gift
in this world that I could ever recieve
than that which you gave birth in me
you made my heart and soul believe

for your love alone I now do pray
and beg forgivness of
and if you never let me in
it’s still you I'll always love




[This message has been edited by TheBlindMan (edited 04-22-2000).]

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poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 2000-04-22 11:49 AM


I sense the pleading and sincerity in this...If this doesn't touch her heart, I don't know what will...I read your challenge, and I will in deed, do some pondering on the subject.  This is a tough one though, but if something comes to me, I'll certainly share it with you, ok?  Hugs to you, and be strong while she searches.  I believe she'll find the most secure place, was right in your arms, where she started out.  Beautiful read, sir.
Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

2 posted 2000-04-22 11:59 AM


I enjoy how you've expressed yourself here! Welcome to Passions, please do keep sharing...

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

3 posted 2000-04-22 12:00 PM


Oh, and lovely title...  
netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
4 posted 2000-04-22 01:07 PM


This is absolutely Beautiful TheBlindMan
I tried to write a poem for you and posted
in your other post ----but it was more
a life's lesson than a poem. It was the
best I could do on a moment's notice.

You take care,
netswan

WhiteNite
Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241
Montgomery, AL
5 posted 2000-04-22 03:21 PM


I never have been very good at dealing with hearts surrounded by walls.  But I know I'd be touched if someone told me I'd help to make them fall.  Hope she is too.

Very heatfilled and beautifully written.

 "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment.
Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott


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