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A ship called why
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A ship called why |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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A ship called why I recently sailed on a ship called why, On a grey green sea, in a cloudless sky. For weeks I moved in the bright of no light. Under the stars of a fathomless night. The birds flew as phantoms, covered like dread. The wind whispered sighs that hovered my head. The ship seemed to wallow a courseless course And my hammock swung, by a ghostly force. I came to an Island of endless beach, A forest too far in distance to reach. And though I called out for someone to hear, It floundered in vain, the void of no ear. I built me a fire just to stay the cold, But the wood only smoked from wet and mold. And I cried to the moon to end this dream, But the moon only laughed a cold white stream. I drama this amour, with an endless ply, On a ship sailing awe, by the name of why? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this a lot, Seymour... perhaps in part because I've been screaming a lot of "why"s lately! *G* Great job! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Beautifully written, as always Liz |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Yes indeed, Beautiful, Sy ..... "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well written. Nicely done. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, Thank you. *L* Liz, You are really something. Love Sy Pepper, Thank you sweet. *L* Mike, Nice comment, thank you. |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Excellent work, Seymour! I was caught up in the rhythmic flow of your words, and carried to the island with you. Thank you for allowing me to share the journey!  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
What an intriguing poem this is! I loved the line "But the moon only laughed a cold white stream." Wow, what marvelous imagery! What bittersweet meaning I read into this wonder. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Seymour, I've intended to tell you this before, but this poem has prompted me to remember how much your work reminds me of that of E.E. Cummings. This particular piece is delightfully dark and curious...I loved reading it. ~ Claire |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...always making me wonder where you are going to take us next...and now on to Liz's response... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Troy, Thank you for the wonderful comment. Rosemary, Thank you my dear, you are one of my favorites. *L* Claire, E.E. Cummings, thank you so much *L* Sunshine, So glad you are enjoying the up and back. *L* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ This is absolutely marvelous ! The lilting rhyme is so melodically charming. I have a wonderful habit of reading most poetry aloud ... oh, my how this one flowed. You are simply a master wordsmith. I have a program called ShadiSoft Speak .. I copied your poem on the clipboard and let the Peedy Parrot character read it to me. Positively charming ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, What you said sounds marvellous, that sounds like a wonderful program. Did you buy it? |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I hope I don't offend anyone. But ya all's my two favorite poets here (and so much of the time, all to real). But I love it when ya all's tango. Sweet, sweet, sweet... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wow! Seymour, this is so intriguing! One of your best, yes siree! Corinne |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
This was a great read~ Loved it~ Marie~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I've been on this ship, Sy. This is one of my favorites from you. Loved the images. Michael |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this..James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
ST, this is beautiful and flows so nicely! enjoyed it very much  What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
And why not? |
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