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A ship called why

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Seymour Tabin
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             A ship called why

I recently sailed on a ship called why,
On a grey green sea, in a cloudless sky.
For weeks I moved in the bright of no light.
Under the stars of a fathomless night.

The birds flew as phantoms, covered like dread.
The wind whispered sighs that hovered my head.
The ship seemed to wallow a courseless course
And my hammock swung, by a ghostly force.

I came to an Island of endless beach,
A forest too far in distance to reach.
And though I called out for someone to hear,
It floundered in vain, the void of no ear.

I built me a fire just to stay the cold,
But the wood only smoked from wet and mold.
And I cried to the moon to end this dream,
But the moon only laughed a cold white stream.

I drama this amour, with an endless ply,
On a ship sailing awe, by the name of why?

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 04-21-2000 11:35 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like this a lot, Seymour... perhaps in part because I've been screaming a lot of "why"s lately! *G* Great job!
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 04-21-2000 12:55 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Beautifully written, as always
Liz
Pepper
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Yes indeed, Beautiful, Sy .....

 "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind."
Maxwell Maltz
Mike
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Well written.  Nicely done.
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 04-21-2000 02:53 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Suthern, Thank you. *L*

Liz, You are really something. Love Sy

Pepper, Thank you sweet. *L*

Mike, Nice comment, thank you.
hsystems
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6 posted 04-21-2000 03:41 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Excellent work, Seymour!  I was caught up in the rhythmic flow of your words, and carried to the island with you.  Thank you for allowing me to share the journey!


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Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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What an intriguing poem this is!  I loved the line "But the moon only laughed a cold white stream."  Wow, what marvelous imagery!  What bittersweet meaning I read into this wonder.
Meadowmuse
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Seymour, I've intended to tell you this before, but this poem has prompted me to remember how much your work reminds me of that of E.E. Cummings. This particular piece is delightfully dark and curious...I loved reading it.

~ Claire
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...always making me wonder where you are going to take us next...and now on to Liz's response...
Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 04-21-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Troy, Thank you for the wonderful comment.

Rosemary, Thank you my dear, you are one of my favorites. *L*

Claire, E.E. Cummings, thank you so much *L*

Sunshine, So glad you are enjoying the up and back. *L*
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11 posted 04-21-2000 09:42 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour~
This is absolutely marvelous !
The lilting rhyme is so melodically charming.
I have a wonderful habit of reading
most poetry aloud ... oh, my how this
one flowed.
You are simply a master wordsmith.
I have a program called ShadiSoft Speak ..
I copied your poem on the clipboard and let the Peedy Parrot character read it to me.
Positively charming !
~*Marge*~


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Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 04-21-2000 11:46 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Marge,
What you said sounds marvellous, that sounds like a wonderful program. Did you buy it?
lucky
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I hope I don't offend anyone. But ya all's my two favorite poets here (and so much of the time, all to real). But I love it when ya all's tango.

Sweet, sweet, sweet...
Corinne
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14 posted 04-22-2000 12:50 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Wow!  Seymour, this is so intriguing! One of your best, yes siree!

Corinne
mariee66
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15 posted 04-22-2000 01:52 AM       View Profile for mariee66   Email mariee66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mariee66

This was a great read~
Loved it~
Marie~
Michael
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16 posted 04-22-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I've been on this ship, Sy.  This is one of my favorites from you.  Loved the images.

Michael
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17 posted 04-22-2000 05:41 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Enjoyed reading this..James
Dark Angel
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ST, this is beautiful and flows so nicely! enjoyed it very much  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Nan
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And why not?
 
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