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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Colors Daylight turns golden as we cross limits of time, charging the air with silent words sublime. Encircling open fields, do not hem us in, kiss upon nape of neck, let the sighs begin. Sweet but never simple, as grapes upon tongue, words fall into poetry in-tune we have sung. Spooning to sleep, beneath apple trees, sun falling in sky with embracing ease. Colors of light I see, reflected in your eyes, sparking purity, naked where we lie. Nothing comes so easily as something meant to be. © 2000 CM Bailey |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely beautiful, Corinne! Denise |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a beautiful poem! I enjoyed it very much, and I can't wait to read more! "It is in our aloneness that we recognize our oneness, even as the single droplet of water knows also that it is the sea."Daniel *Cassie Roseen* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So beautiful and romantic, Corinne. |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Corinne, This is a nice poem that is a little confusing. In the first line it says, "daylight turns golden", which made me think that it was early morning. And then later I read, "sun falling in sky". I thought, what's going on? I think maybe you should start out with "Sunlight turns golden" as it is a little less vague and a reader wouldn't think that it was morning. Just thought you should know. best regards, bboog |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful poem!  |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Corinne~ So colourful, a very lovley poem which I enjoyed very much Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you Denise, Dawn Eclipse, Martie! Bboog, the afternoon is golden as well, no? Thanks Suthern and Tracie66! Corinne |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Oh, this is so pretty. I could just picture the warm golden glow of the afternoon sun ... slowly casting her colors across the meadow ... reaching toward the sunset of lovers. ABSOLUTELY beautiful, lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Corinne ... beautifully written ... and so easily read ... can't wait for the warmer days to lose myself in love and nature Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, this is soo beautiful, I'm glad I dragged my sick sorry butt out of bed to read it again. Your words are the sweet nectar of passion fruit. Parker |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
Adobe Tones Golden moments paint the day, blending now with then. Silent moments clearly say what is felt within Fields of sweetness cradle us in such free expanse. Lips and neck and sighs progress in this freshest dance Peeling layers from our words, joined in renewed song. Sweet, the flesh beneath is heard - intricate and strong. Lying close in echoed curves - mirrored, graceful trust. Pulling comfort, now relearned, drawn from nearing dusk. Earthen peace, surrounding us, matched within your eyes - deep and open, virtuous, safest port for mine. Dance steps come so easily when they trace what's meant to be. © RAM 4/28/00 |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I enjoy your writing |
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