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Effigy
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-04-20 07:30 PM


Dictionary-like Words, and Old English Metaphors, that Most People Really Don't Understand"

Sinking lower,
bogging down.
Fearing what you just might,
possibly could have thought.
(I'm so shy)
It's not what you say,
it's how you say it.
(I say nothing)
It's not the point that matters,
but the tone in your voice.
(There is no tone, just silence)
I'm growing smaller,
less and less and less,
a little bit less every other day.
I'm far beyond infinite.
Much less than nothing.
A freak inside,
under an invisible cloak of normality.

THE SOUL OF A MESSIAH!
A POET!
A WORD SMITH!
A JOKE!

It's not the words or,
size of the letters,
that construct art.
It's how screwed-up
you, yourself are.
Deconstructing reality.
Putting your soul on the line.
Criticized by those who don't understand!
Those who won't understand!
To H.E. double hockey sticks with them!!
Let them try.
"CONFORM!!
CONFORM!"
they yell.
How many famous,
average people have you heard of?
I must have my own style.
Must create.
Must destroy.

I grow less every day.
I must be...
truly less than nothing.


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Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094
Coastal Texas
1 posted 2000-04-20 07:46 PM


Effigy...gotta say I can relate, and I like the style you portray here.  Yeah, it's bitter, angst-ridden, and angry...but flows, espousing personal identity and thought.

Well done, and I hope to see more soon.

Alicat

Boovoltz
New Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 8

2 posted 2000-04-21 01:00 AM


some what of an angry poem, but I loved it.  
serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2000-04-21 01:07 AM


EEEEYOWWWIEEEE!!!!

(oops, sorry, I forget meself...)

I do agree, implicitly...

forne_marin
Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina
4 posted 2004-04-16 12:00 PM


The title carries most of the punch of the work, but I like it nonetheless. The internal conversation in the poem "(I'm so shy)" kind of leaves the reader not real sure who the voice is, but that's okay, it bleeds into the overall confused voice of the piece. Overall I like it.
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