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A Retaliation to the Half-assed, Myopic Idea that Poetry Must Consist of Long.....

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Effigy
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since 04-11-2000
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Just sitting at the computer


0 posted 04-20-2000 07:30 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Effigy

Dictionary-like Words, and Old English Metaphors, that Most People Really Don't Understand"

Sinking lower,
bogging down.
Fearing what you just might,
possibly could have thought.
(I'm so shy)
It's not what you say,
it's how you say it.
(I say nothing)
It's not the point that matters,
but the tone in your voice.
(There is no tone, just silence)
I'm growing smaller,
less and less and less,
a little bit less every other day.
I'm far beyond infinite.
Much less than nothing.
A freak inside,
under an invisible cloak of normality.

THE SOUL OF A MESSIAH!
A POET!
A WORD SMITH!
A JOKE!

It's not the words or,
size of the letters,
that construct art.
It's how screwed-up
you, yourself are.
Deconstructing reality.
Putting your soul on the line.
Criticized by those who don't understand!
Those who won't understand!
To H.E. double hockey sticks with them!!
Let them try.
"CONFORM!!
CONFORM!"
they yell.
How many famous,
average people have you heard of?
I must have my own style.
Must create.
Must destroy.

I grow less every day.
I must be...
truly less than nothing.

© Copyright 2000 Effigy - All Rights Reserved
Alicat
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since 05-23-99
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1 posted 04-20-2000 07:46 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Effigy...gotta say I can relate, and I like the style you portray here.  Yeah, it's bitter, angst-ridden, and angry...but flows, espousing personal identity and thought.

Well done, and I hope to see more soon.

Alicat
Boovoltz
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since 04-19-2000
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2 posted 04-21-2000 01:00 AM       View Profile for Boovoltz   Email Boovoltz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Boovoltz

some what of an angry poem, but I loved it.  
serenity blaze
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since 02-02-2000
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3 posted 04-21-2000 01:07 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

EEEEYOWWWIEEEE!!!!

(oops, sorry, I forget meself...)

I do agree, implicitly...
forne_marin
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since 04-13-2004
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4 posted 04-16-2004 12:00 AM       View Profile for forne_marin   Email forne_marin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit forne_marin's Home Page   View IP for forne_marin

The title carries most of the punch of the work, but I like it nonetheless. The internal conversation in the poem "(I'm so shy)" kind of leaves the reader not real sure who the voice is, but that's okay, it bleeds into the overall confused voice of the piece. Overall I like it.
 
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