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Tara Simms
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0 posted 2000-04-19 11:40 PM


~This is a repost from Open 2 (not based on a personal experience)~

DADDY’S GIRL

A grown up man and a little girl
Make such a shameful pair.
He repeatedly abuses her,
She doesn’t seem to care.

This is the life she’s forced to live,
She knows she has no choice.
His big hands no longer needed
To muffle her screaming voice.

It wasn’t all that long ago
When the light in her eyes died.
The day Daddy climbed in her bed
And forced himself inside.

His eyes were lit by the fire
That fueled his burning need.
She tightly clenched her eyes shut
As he showered her with seed.

He reached the peaks of ecstasy
Surrounded by a world of sin.
Silent tears flowed abundantly
As her essence died within.

To be abused by the man she loves
Such a cruel twist of fate
Hardly a lesson to be learned
At the tender age of eight.



[This message has been edited by Tara Simms (edited 04-19-2000).]

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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1 posted 2000-04-19 11:46 PM



Even though this is not a personal expierence you wrote from your caring heart showed and although this is not my expierence it touches me as I read it and feel your words. Thank you for sharing and reminding us of all the angels that need our help.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.


Jeffrey Carter
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2 posted 2000-04-19 11:50 PM


For this not to be from experience I'd say you captured the "nightmare" very well

Jeffrey

Marina
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3 posted 2000-04-19 11:52 PM


This is very well written and definitly describes the type of abuse we are fighting against.  Thank you Tara for contributing two poems to our cause both were perfect.

Marina

netswan
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4 posted 2000-04-20 12:07 PM


Tara -- GOD! this hits hard.  Such a
heart rendering well done
poem. The challenge more than met!

Thank you for sharing. I know these
things are tough to write about, but it
does help clean the heart -

The tears, I am shedding at this very moment,
are for you, for all children, for others
who have written out their pain - and for
me --------Children Grown -- you are not
alone.
netswan

netswan
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5 posted 2000-04-20 12:12 PM


OOPS, I see that this was not your own
experience -----gosh, sometimes, I just
go straight to the poem.  Sorry about
that. -- very well written and I
am so glad this did not happen to you,
Tara.

netswan


Tara Simms
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6 posted 2000-04-20 12:41 PM


Thank you all for reading and replying.  No, it's not my story, but it is the story of many, I'm afraid.  
Janet Marie
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7 posted 2000-04-20 12:43 PM


very poweful and emotional work here Tara,
very well written, and I am most relieved its not personal experience.
take care, jm

WhiteNite
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8 posted 2000-04-20 03:34 AM



Grrrr... this poem ticks me off to be honest... but it's because it's so good. =)

I loved the rythm here and the way you didn't hide any of the details.  (I'm not a sicko or a perv. keep on reading)  

------------------
His eyes were lit by the fire
That fueled his burning need.
She tightly clenched her eyes shut
As he showered her with seed.

He reached the peaks of ecstasy
Surrounded by a world of sin.
Silent tears flowed abundantly
As her essence died within.
------------------

That verse.. stanza.. whatever it's called anyway... that just makes it so crystal clear how an innocent child has no place in such context... God it ticks me off!  Needless to say I won't be meeting this challenge.  

It didn't happen to me either but it affected me by happening to someone I loved.  Still a good thing he lives on the other side of America. =)


 "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment.
Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott

Jeffrey Carter
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9 posted 2000-04-20 05:37 PM


BTT
Tara Simms
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10 posted 2000-04-20 06:38 PM


Jeffrey, what does BTT mean?
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11 posted 2000-04-20 06:45 PM


This poem is so sad, but so well-written. You met the challenge well.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

Aimster
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12 posted 2000-04-20 08:55 PM


-The challenge was more than met w/ this poem. Love flowed through every line even though it was a horrible sounding poem? Does that make sense? At any rate..I am most relieved also that this didn't happen to you. However, you truly possess the heart and soul to write about such a challenging subject. God Bless!

AMY

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Dawn Eclipse
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13 posted 2000-04-20 10:58 PM


That was a truly amazing poem.  It shows a side of society that I hate to think about.. one that shouldn't be there.

 "It is in our aloneness
that we recognize our oneness,
even as the single droplet of water
knows also that it is the sea."Daniel

*Cassie Roseen*



jbowie
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14 posted 2000-04-20 11:10 PM


very well written and you ommited none of the nightmare. Ughh, I can not believe this can happen because of how much I love my daughter.

 A real man
kisses his children goodnight

Lisann
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15 posted 2001-08-08 12:45 PM


Hello Tara.  This poem really ticked me off-------------BECAUSE THIS GIRL WAS ME.  Man, oh man, you've created a flood of memories tonight with this poem.  But,  That is not necessarily a bad thing.  I need to rid the pain somehow.

I wrote a poem about my experience.  I think I put it in Open forum 12.  I believe I called it children of war.

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