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Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-04-19 12:52 PM


this is hard for me to write about, and right now this is the best I can come up with....sigh...might do me good to write more....so will think more about it....


damage report

we played
we laughed
we watched cartoons
we sat in the sun
and did nothing
without fear
we pretended
and did
what normal
people do
until you came home
and then we
didn't laugh
we didn't play
and we pretended
even more

and today
the years find
you calmer
and
us still
pretending
it didn't happen
pretending
it didn't affect
everything
we say
and
do


© Copyright 2000 zoe d. - All Rights Reserved
Tess
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
1 posted 2000-04-19 01:03 PM


How simply put, but how poignant! Funny isnt it, how sometimes families conspire..without words to sustain the illusions and facades of the past.
Well done. Thanks for writing this. i know how hard it is to write about something, esp when you have done your best to forget, or pretend it didnt happen.

 "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time
that you've never had it before."
~author unknown~



Marina
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
2 posted 2000-04-19 01:31 PM


Corazon, I think it an excellent example and post for our cause. It is indeed simple and that's what makes the message so clear!  Thank you for contributing and posting.  Challenge well met.

Marina

Martie
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3 posted 2000-04-19 01:50 PM


The most difficult thing to talk about sometimes brings the most healing when it is.  Well done!!
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-04-19 05:51 PM


and
us still
pretending
it didn't happen
pretending
it didn't affect
everything
we say
and
do
------------

C, this is excellent,
you said it all and said it well...
denile...it is always an ingredient in pain anmd cycles unbroken...but it is a normal,
human defense mechanism as well,
take care, heal as you write,
jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

5 posted 2000-04-19 06:12 PM


well this poet sighs deeply and says thank you...this has been a very deeply thoughtful day as I have read so many of these touching sad poems...my heart is heavy with grief for the abuse I am helpless to stop...even for the one that was me.....sigh
Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
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6 posted 2000-04-19 07:39 PM


You certainly brought the point home in a poignant manner, Corazon. At the risk of sounding flippant, which I am certainly not trying to be, this poem could be entitled, "The Silence of the Lambs". Wonderful writing.
Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

7 posted 2000-04-19 07:51 PM


Good writing, thank you for sharing this. And I know just what you mean...I've had to come offline several times today while reading here. Let us find healing in the sharing.

~ Claire

netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
8 posted 2000-04-19 07:56 PM


Corazon - this is simply put and I feel
that you probably have a million words
to say ---and yet, you did it great!

This is touching and breaks my heart.

Thanks for sharing

netswan

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
9 posted 2000-04-19 09:27 PM


This is a very to the point piece of writing that is true of families and also in a broader view denial is an attitude prevalent in communities, neighborhoods and churches,"those sort of things wouldn't happen here". People seem to think that it is the down and outers and people on the other side of the railroad track, where that sort of thing goes on, when in truth it has no social boundaries. It is the person you sometimes least expect.
Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

10 posted 2000-04-20 09:51 AM


sighs, hugs, and thanks to all....and yes...I hope this sharing is good for us all  
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