navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #7 » Love's Burdened Heart
Open Poetry #7
Post A Reply Post New Topic Love's Burdened Heart Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
mariee66
Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind

0 posted 2000-04-18 10:14 PM


In your eyes
I see the weight of your soul--
Tortured and silent.

Many times I want to reach to you
Take you in these arms
And strip away the burden.

You are so far…
So silent…
So lonely.

I hear your cries
And with you I shed tears of anguish.
I cry your river of tears.

I sense your longing
In the darkness enfolding us
My heart chills and breaks.

If only together
We could halt this torture
Face each challenge as one.

But my love…
You are so removed…
So tacit…
For how long?


[I had to rename this...didn't like the original title]
Marie~


[This message has been edited by mariee66 (edited 04-19-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Marie E. - All Rights Reserved
Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
1 posted 2000-04-19 12:32 PM


very nicely done ... these people can break your heart ... you know they're hurting ... but they continue on and bear the weight in silence ... sad

Rex}>{{{{o>

Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
2 posted 2000-04-19 03:20 AM


Mariee~
A poem full of haunting refrain.
Where indeed?
Wonderful.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
3 posted 2000-04-19 03:40 AM


Marie, what a lovely well written poem.

Thanks for sharing.

netswan

mariee66
Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind
4 posted 2000-04-19 01:09 PM


Thanks Rex~
Yeah, it breaks my heart to see their pain~

Thank you Marge~
I guess it is a bit eery~

Netswan~
Thank you for your comment~

Marie~

Tess
Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
5 posted 2000-04-19 01:19 PM


A sad and haunting poem Mariee.


 "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time
that you've never had it before."
~author unknown~



TerryW
Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA
6 posted 2000-04-19 02:30 PM


Mariee
     I must agree, it is a very haunting refrain.  I like this one.  The mood just sort of grabbed me and held on tightly.  I always love reading your work, dear!



 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

mariee66
Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind
7 posted 2000-04-19 10:29 PM


Tess and Terry, thank you~
This is sad...not sure what more I can do for this friend~
Marie~

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #7 » Love's Burdened Heart

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary