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Where do Angels come from?
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Where do Angels come from? |
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MerritW Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 33Texas |
This is a poem I wrote about this person I cherish, but, it seems like there's something missing to it. If anyone has any suggestions or anything at all I'd really like your help.... Where do angels come from? They come from within your eyes. They rest upon you heart all day, and at night travel through the skys. They go to see the man above, to whisper tales of your soul. Our God Almighty is very pleased, for you have surpased his goal. Like butterflies and stars, you float throughout the air. With seeds of love that grow inside, and you spread them everywhere. It's you that brings me happiness. I'll cherish you forever. I wish I could do what you do for me, and fill your heart with pleasure. [This message has been edited by MerritW (edited 04-20-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Welcome to passions! I don't have anything to add. Furthermore I don't think anything needs to be added. I like it just the way it is. Jeffrey  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-merrit first off, i am honored that i am the first one to post to your poem! secondly, i wouldn't change anything in this poem. This was not only a good first post, this was just plain beautiful period. You and this person are very lucky to have one another in your lives. Always cherish them! Take care and welcome to Passions. Amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
I agree with the others, you should leave it as is~ WELCOME! Marie~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Merrit~ Welcome to Passion's. This is a lovely entrance you've made. You'll find that you will grow to love it here. Enjoyed the read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Compgirl Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 85USA |
All I can say is ...DITTO...Keep it as it is..sounds good..I felt the heart.. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi MerritW, This is lovely just the way it is, very nice first post, hope to see more of your work. Welcome to passions, Cerenity |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! Please check your email for a special welcome!  |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I can only echo the comments already made here. I see nothing missing and certainly wouldn't presume to add anything. I like it the way it is. Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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Ella Junior Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 20 |
Welcome. I think this piece is beautiful on it's own. Don't doubt yourself. Excellent writing beautiful!!!!! Ella |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a beautiful poem. I enjoyed it very much, and nothing needs to be changed. Nothing at all "It is in our aloneness that we recognize our oneness, even as the single droplet of water knows also that it is the sea."Daniel *Cassie Roseen* |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Welcome to Passions!! This is perfect just the way it is...felt within your heart and written with eloquence. No one could ask for more. |
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MerritW Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 33Texas |
Thank you everyone. This means a lot to me. Thank you soo much. |
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