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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2000-04-18 12:22 PM


On Wing of Butterfly

One day a splendid vision came to settle in my eye
That I would  fly for just one day on wing of butterfly
I crept into the garden and I carefully took note
Until I found the perfect wing on which I’d like to float

The butterfly then nodded as she welcomed her new guest
And seemed to understand the quiet meaning of my quest
On silver gleams of colored wing in early morning light
I lay upon her supple wing as she took off in flight

A garden was her paradise, the summer breeze her friend
And joyous thrill at every venture neither could pretend
From silky leaf to scarlet petal she would pleasure bring
And lightly brush the pollen stems against her golden wing

I felt the plush and sun-lit warmth upon her velvet gown
The comfort of a pillow soft with every up and down
A gush of wind then swept her wing to heights without an aim
And looking down I saw the troubled earth from which I came

She fluttered down in giant swoops and finally came to pose
Upon the upturned petals of a fragrant crimson rose
She left me there in my despair in emptiness and pain
Alone to ponder silently effects of my disdain

Sometimes the greatest sights and places you will ever find
Are fragrant, lovely, wondrous, velvet journeys through the mind
A trip on silken windblown sail, deception would belie
To think that I could sail through life on wing of butterfly

Elizabeth Santos

© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Mike
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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

1 posted 2000-04-18 05:08 PM


What an absolute treat to read.  A true gem here.
Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 92
Salvador , Bahia , Brazil
2 posted 2000-04-18 05:46 PM


Wonderful poem , beautiful story
I just loved it


 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society

lucky
Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
3 posted 2000-05-15 12:57 PM


Oh,

But Liz, I found that Rose
such a wonderful place to live
and I thank your butterfly
for a love it had to give.

Nice thoughts for me... I give it a peachy 4's

RE: to RE: yeah, at the time there were 45 pages and this was on p.44 with only two replies, I thought this must be a typo, and then after finding that lovely Rose it just had to go to the top... Plus I knew Martie was always playin in the garden... well look what's happened. WOW... it's a Butterfly.

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 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name.  (Michelle A. Bartley)

[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 05-15-2000).]

HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
Canada
4 posted 2000-05-15 01:04 AM


Liz
Absoluty stunning
I wish that I could be
With you on this ride of fantasy
I loved, I liked what I have read
But now it's late
And I have to go to bed
I hope that I will dream
Seeing you and your butterfly go by on my midnight screen


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

5 posted 2000-05-15 01:09 AM


Oh, Oh, Elizabeth, how beautiful!!! my heart jumped in leaps and bounds reading this beautiful poem.
excellent work my friend!< !signature-->

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge




[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 05-15-2000).]

Parker
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
ON
6 posted 2000-05-15 01:19 AM


Well Liz, I think I've sailed through some of life on the wings of your wonderful poetry, my little butterfly. So maybe you can.
I really loved this piece, your such a talented butterfly.

Parker

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
7 posted 2000-05-15 01:23 AM


Oh, Elizabeth, I don't know how I missed this one!  It's absolutely beautiful!  I'm so glad my husband rounded it up so I could read it, and let you know how I love it!

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8 posted 2000-05-15 01:42 AM


Elizabeth, my friend~
This is lovely, my dear.
Your words take wing.

You've inspired me (which isn't uncommon)
*I love you, lady.
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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WhiteNite
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 241
Montgomery, AL
9 posted 2000-05-15 02:22 AM


Another great poet... er poem... poet too though. =)

I wish I could write so fluently about my own fantasies... I haven't learned to do it yet... boy if I ever do I'm sure to become a frequent poster in the Adult Forums. =)

Thanks Liz... every word of this one was pure perfection.  I loved the way you described the wings... awesome.

 "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment.
Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott



ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
10 posted 2000-05-15 08:35 AM


This is lovely, Liz! Such a beautiful fantasy you paint in this.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
11 posted 2000-05-15 09:36 AM


Elizabeth--

I really liked this one A LOT!! This was simply beautiful...i loved your choice of wording and imagery...very vivid! great job!

take care,
amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
12 posted 2000-05-15 12:04 PM


I had long forgotten about this poem, til Dale somehow pulled it out of the woodwork. Your comments are all so lovely. Thank you all
Liz

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

13 posted 2000-05-15 02:31 PM


This is enchanting, magical and full of wisdom. But of course, what else would it be from you!  

Denise

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
14 posted 2000-05-15 04:12 PM


You can always trust Dale to find the butterfly in the garden...what a beautiful trip you took me on...
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