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Moon Sail

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Martie
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Moon Sail

The moon was full and floating
in a sea of clouds so soft
it seemed it moved with swift breeze aft
across white splaying froth

A golden halo ‘round it formed
in holy light displayed
I knew it sailed with your delight
for the vision was angel made

If reverent sky beholds the dawn
and leaves me longing thus
for luna landscape ocean sky
and memories painful thrust

I understand this place was gleaned
of scarlet sundown’s cast
and ne'er will these eyes glimpse again
the moon sail night of last.

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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exquisite Martie...the moonlight pales in the glow of this beauty  
very serene and pretty poem to read.
take care, jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon


Mike
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2 posted 04-17-2000 06:27 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Beautifully done Martie.  You would have to know how much I would like this one.
hoot_owl_rn
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I could picture this one clearly in my mind  
Marge Tindal
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Martie~
You and I share once again,
the beauty of the moon.
This is exquisitely done.
So luna perfect.
You sure got a way of glowing, lady.
~*Marge*~


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Absolutely beautiful, Martie! And rhymes, too!

Denise
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Nice,The rythym seems off center at times, but otherwise beautiful. You have powerful descriptive adjectives that could be made even more telling if paired with a definite underlying message.( Of course, it's your thoughts, so if it has an underlying message for you, then there is no problem.)
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Nice,The rythym seems off center at times, but otherwise beautiful. You have powerful descriptive adjectives that could be made even more telling if paired with a definite underlying message.( Of course, it's your thoughts, so if it has an underlying message for you, then there is no problem.)

 ~If eyes were made for seeing, then Beauty is its own excuse for Being~
RW Emerson
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silvery and shining, just like the poet!

Corinne
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Very nice Martie I didn't see any botany. There at least should of been at least a few moonlit flowers on shimmering deck. Ha! You know it's just fine the way it sits. They'd probably fall over with the waves and all.
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Gorgeous, Martie ....
Simply perfect ......


 "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind."
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Thanks all for reading and replying to this poem.  
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the images you have painted of late have been beautiful...as is this.....oft I have seen the moon and wondered who shared with me in its beauty  
Elizabeth Santos
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Well, well, well, what have we here?
A free-verser writing absolutey  exquisite rhyme.
Martie, this is outstanding and only proves your poetic versatility. I am so proud of this.
You have outdone yourself, me, and every other poet I know.
Congratulations on a superb piece
Liz
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Beautiful Poem, Martie
A treat to read
I hope to read more soon.


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Poetry & Friendship,
PrincessPoet

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(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, this is such an angelic poem that shines with such light and beauty! (kiss on cheek) This is a gorgeous breathtaking poem, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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