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Moon Sail |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Moon Sail The moon was full and floating in a sea of clouds so soft it seemed it moved with swift breeze aft across white splaying froth A golden halo ‘round it formed in holy light displayed I knew it sailed with your delight for the vision was angel made If reverent sky beholds the dawn and leaves me longing thus for luna landscape ocean sky and memories painful thrust I understand this place was gleaned of scarlet sundown’s cast and ne'er will these eyes glimpse again the moon sail night of last. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
exquisite Martie...the moonlight pales in the glow of this beauty  very serene and pretty poem to read. take care, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Beautifully done Martie. You would have to know how much I would like this one. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I could picture this one clearly in my mind  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ You and I share once again, the beauty of the moon. This is exquisitely done. So luna perfect. You sure got a way of glowing, lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely beautiful, Martie! And rhymes, too! Denise |
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FairyEyes New Member
since 2000-04-17
Posts 7Louisiana |
Nice,The rythym seems off center at times, but otherwise beautiful. You have powerful descriptive adjectives that could be made even more telling if paired with a definite underlying message.( Of course, it's your thoughts, so if it has an underlying message for you, then there is no problem.) |
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FairyEyes New Member
since 2000-04-17
Posts 7Louisiana |
Nice,The rythym seems off center at times, but otherwise beautiful. You have powerful descriptive adjectives that could be made even more telling if paired with a definite underlying message.( Of course, it's your thoughts, so if it has an underlying message for you, then there is no problem.) ~If eyes were made for seeing, then Beauty is its own excuse for Being~ RW Emerson " I'll paint you mornings of gold, Ill spin you valentine evenings..." *JARETH* |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
silvery and shining, just like the poet! Corinne |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Very nice Martie I didn't see any botany. There at least should of been at least a few moonlit flowers on shimmering deck. Ha! You know it's just fine the way it sits. They'd probably fall over with the waves and all. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Gorgeous, Martie .... Simply perfect ...... "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks all for reading and replying to this poem. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
the images you have painted of late have been beautiful...as is this.....oft I have seen the moon and wondered who shared with me in its beauty |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Well, well, well, what have we here? A free-verser writing absolutey exquisite rhyme. Martie, this is outstanding and only proves your poetic versatility. I am so proud of this. You have outdone yourself, me, and every other poet I know. Congratulations on a superb piece Liz |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
Beautiful Poem, Martie A treat to read I hope to read more soon.  Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, this is such an angelic poem that shines with such light and beauty! (kiss on cheek) This is a gorgeous breathtaking poem, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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