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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 2000-04-17 11:29 AM



Windowpanes



Morning sky in heavy languish,
maiden moist with aching air
as a broiling roll of canvas,
once alive with passion's care
for what long was daily drama,
now hangs, is simply bare.
What became
of all my cloudy days of dreaming?

Where might my lover tread,
so ever solemnly to roam
while I, now fallen futile
to the honor of nights alone,
gaze out from leaden windowpanes,
only words to make my home.
Who shall come
to ease my blood from sorrow's steaming?


Dear LadyClaire



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PoeticKnight
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1 posted 2000-04-17 12:18 PM


Another beautiful work of art here Claire. Kinda beautifully sad....or sadly beautiful....*L*
RSEvans
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2 posted 2000-04-17 12:21 PM


"to ease my blood from sorrow's steaming..."
What time should I be there...?  Beautiful verse muse.

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-04-17 12:32 PM


another so perfect and delicate poem Claire,
I think that is what is my fav thing about your work,
they have such a delicate, fragile quality about them.
lovely,
take care, jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



Mike
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4 posted 2000-04-17 01:45 PM


Beauty, O' beauty how wonderous thy touch.


christies heart
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5 posted 2000-04-17 02:44 PM


Claire, Again such a wonderful and perfect poem. Truely touching and honest. Thank you for sharing it.

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

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Martie
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6 posted 2000-04-17 03:13 PM


Claire, this is so full of aching tenderness and so beautiful.
Meadowmuse
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7 posted 2000-04-17 03:23 PM


JML...thank you... either of those two descriptions shall I most humbly and gratefully accept.

RS...though time is relative, the evening seems to be the most empty when one is alone.  Thank you for reading and enjoying this.

Janet Marie...a very sweet thing to say. I'm glad you liked this little one...thank you.

Mike...ah, Mike...

Chris...thank you, for reading, for enjoying, and for letting me know.

~ Claire


  

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8 posted 2000-04-17 03:33 PM


Beautiful and quite fragile, yes...
Michael
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9 posted 2000-04-17 09:16 PM


Ah, the frailty of the human heart.  Such beautiful longing.  Amazing how cold those windowpanes can become sometimes.
Lovely poem, though.


Michael

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10 posted 2000-04-17 09:27 PM


Claire...your words are truly a reflection of the wonderful person you are  
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11 posted 2000-04-17 09:29 PM


Excellent writing, Claire!

Denise

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12 posted 2000-04-17 10:36 PM


Claire~
You simply say it like no one else can.
Fragments of your heart ... so lovely.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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13 posted 2000-04-17 11:11 PM


Ah Claire, you can mold words in such a unique and stunning way like no one I've ever seen.  You continue to be one of my most favorite poets.  Once again, a beautiful masterpiece.  

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

Skyfyre
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14 posted 2000-04-17 11:21 PM


What became
of all my cloudy days of dreaming?


That line is a poem in itself, Claire.  A pleasure to read, as usual.  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


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15 posted 2000-04-18 12:00 PM


Claire,
       like tiny crystalline that forms on the windowpanes, so are your words. . . they form on the heart, and leave their mark on the soul. . .

Excellent poem, my friend. . .

--------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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16 posted 2000-04-18 12:09 PM


Quite excellent poetry in this piece

Jeffrey

Meadowmuse
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17 posted 2000-04-18 12:49 PM


I've not been able to spend much "quality" time here of late, but I am certainly grateful to each of you for taking the time to read. I'm glad there was something in this little poem that spoke to you.

Thanks, in earnest, for all your kind words...

~ Claire

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18 posted 2000-04-18 01:08 AM


well done Claire ... Always enjoy your work

Rex}>{{{{o>

bboog
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19 posted 2000-04-18 01:52 AM


MM~
If the eyes are the windows of the soul, your eyes are leaden. nice image.
bboog

Elizabeth Santos
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20 posted 2000-04-18 07:51 AM


Claire,
You are an inspiration to all poets, but what poetic heights we look up to in your verses. You have an amazing gift
Liz

Nan
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21 posted 2000-04-18 03:32 PM


You know I love your work, so I'll just choose the lines I like best..

"...while I, now fallen futile
to the honor of nights alone,
gaze out from leaden windowpanes,
only words to make my home."

Parker
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22 posted 2000-04-18 04:41 PM


....Who shall come
to ease my blood from sorrow's steaming?

really loved this last line......
and of course the whole poem.

Parker

Irish Rose
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23 posted 2000-04-18 08:59 PM


This was breathtaking!

 Kathleen


Compgirl
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24 posted 2000-04-19 12:29 PM


I have read many of your poems, but this I have to move back to the top..
Corinne
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25 posted 2000-04-19 12:50 PM


lovely poem, meadowmuse, sad and beautiful.

Corinne

Meadowmuse
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26 posted 2000-04-19 08:10 AM


Thanks so much to each of you for reading this piece and responding so kindly. Your words bring much encouragement to me today. Take care, all.

love and shared peace,
Claire

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