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Nine years too young
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
Her eyes shine like crystal water, < !signature-->despite the changing stream of time. She looks to me with cynical hope, this girl who's all but nine. Born to wear the mask of shame, a child trapped in hate's tremulous gaze. Was there ever hug of purity given? so precious once, she exists now in a haze. "Goodbye to innocence" a fabulous line meant for the fond memories of age. What of innocence never known? Such demons of tourture master her rage! Carried away, all smiles and bubbles, a plastic shell of potential lost. Playing like a puppy on the hospital floor, She already knows that love carries a cost. Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians Native American prayer [This message has been edited by christies heart (edited 04-17-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Her eyes shine like crystal water, despite the changing stream of time. She looks to me with cynical hope, this girl who's all but nine. -------------- "Goodbye to innocence" a fabulous line meant for the fond memories of age. What of innocence never known? Such demons of tourture master her rage! ------------- Chris...this one has taken my words... the truths and emotions of it and of the last line... yes, my words are taken...my heart too. take care sweets, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Dear, Very powerful piece. I really like what you did with this one.  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
Janet Marie, I really appreciate your response. It means a lot!  I am also pleased that the emotions That touch me can reach you as well!Terry, Thanks for your kind response. This poem is one of the more meaningful ones for me, so I am glad that I was able to express that. Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians Native American prayer |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very powerful, and very sad. Well done! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
My wife told me a story the other day about when she was 5 how she felt so grown up... and how that surely when she was 10 she would surely be old enough by then. I never could figure out "old enough for what..!" but never the less it was very cute. |
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