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Once In A Blue Moon
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Once In A Blue Moon |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Somewhere is rising, a moon painted blue. Is it these tears, which creates such a view? Rising high above this e'en's torpid pall, A glimmer of hope- first one since the fall. Moon, oh silver orb, where is thy white light Painted in argent to shine through my plight? Blue hue unrefined, accosting my eyes... A true travesty when e'en nature cries. Rising into sky, coloring the earth; Moon christened Denial, a hopeful rebirth. Painted ‘cross my face, you promise a chance. Blue crystalline sphere, you promise romance. Is it in truth that once in ev'ry lifetime, Somewhere is true love to fit each paradigm? Painted midnight, quiet contemplation, Blue echoing lonesome conversation. Somewhere my love is awaiting a smile; Is waiting as I, for someone worthwhile. A breeze on my face dries tears from my eyes. Rising from knees, I raise fists to the skies. "Moon of my pain hear these words from inside, A man I was, empty, even of pride. Blue cloaked all the days as I walked in death, Painted an un-life, stole ev'ry breath Moon, born in the light of never-can-be, Is a new man. From the past now, I'm free!" Rising o'er my path as I smile "adieu," Somewhere is rising, a moon painted blue. [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 04-17-2000).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
BTW- IT'S HAPPY PEOPLE!!! THERE'S A GOOD ENDING! IT'S NOT DEPRESSING!!!Cool? [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 04-16-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I bow in humble adoration of your work.... |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Reads...reads...reads again...then falls over laughing... Chris...this is wonderful...and I really enjoyed the blending of other colors to aid the acrostic....wow!!! Alicat the Persnikitty |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
What interesting thoughts we have here -- quite unique in your approach. Not my favorite from a poetic standpoint, but I'll give you an "A" for creativity ...  --Me Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
A fresh new start...I like!  (uuhhhuu...wow George...loookit all the colors!)  Keep 'em comin'! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Chris this is sooooooooooo cool! I love how you did that acrostic! Man, that hard to be hard and take a lot of time. But for some reason you're gonna tell me it didn't right?  I love it buddy!!! |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Well..certainly is once in a blue moon that it is a happy poem(Just kiddding...don't kill me or something) whew ! had to put that there....Loved your creativity!! Ps glad to see you happy once again!!!! (jumping for joy)!!!! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Glad to see you back among the living, Chris!!G* You've stolen my breath with this one...well-played emotion, recovery, and a smiley ending...I loved it!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher~ This is absolutely breathtaking. The content is impressive. The 'poem within' is such a delight. Of course the color blending is beautiful. The ending is HAPPY ! And it's about a most wonderful subject that I love ... that 'Writer's Moon'. You are precious ! You're the greatest ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Christopher - Quit yelling and leave the people alone! Sharon - I know. Ali - Pick yourself up, you're only encouraging him... uhh, me, I mean him, uuhhh... thanks. Kess - Sigh, nothing satisfies you does it??? hmm, can I win? YES!!! Nic - WAKE UP!! Have some more coffee! LOL, thanks m'friend! Becca - Umm, busted... took me about ten minutes... maybe that's why it sounds FORCED, huh KESS??? Ahem, sorry Becca, anyway... thank you!!! RH - No murder, thank you for the reply... and be careful not to hit your head on the ceiling! Devina - No, not among the living, but trying to get there... if I could only get this casket open... hmmph...arrgh... Marge - Uhhh, (lush,) gee, you took me by surprise with that one! I'm honored that it hit such a good spot with you! You've humbled me with your praise! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Christopher, Somewhere is rising a poet in my heart Who captured my heartstrings and tore them apart So lovely his verses, so wondrous the thought ‘Twas surely a song from an angel I caught But no, this sweet music that I would consume Was echoing off of a quiet blue moon A young humble poet created a rhyme That sounds like an angel song, sung for all time The stars looking down cannot tell them apart Somewhere there is rising a poet in my heart Liz |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You shine brightly tonight my friend. I applaude your effort to bid adieu the past. I think your rebirth has already taken place. Wonderful work. Michael |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Careful not to say too much...just WOW. Nice.... |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Christopher, You have woven a wonderful tapestry with this one. The colors are not only for the eyes, but for the heart as well. I love it. ~HAPPY!~ (by the way, I have a crowbar if you still can't get your casket open. I had trouble with mine not too long ago, too )~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Very creative writing, a refreshing change! Nice work. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
 The bluest of moons cannot cast such a glow as lovely as verse of sweet poet I know. This is wonderful writing, Chris...splendid presentation. ~ Claire |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
Hi, Chris: You don't know me but, I must say when I started reading I couldn't stop, you piece here reminds me of Robert & Elizabeth Browning It's really good, increasingly happy to its sentiment Poetry & Frienship, From: PrincessPoet |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Liz - Sigh. You sure know how to melt a man's heart m'dear! You yourself have a tongue with which to remake worlds. Thank you, thank you. Mike - Re-birth, perhaps, or merely an interlude... one never knows until the proverbial fat lady, huh? Gen - Why so quiet? 'Tis quite unlike you!!! SPEAK!!! TerryW - Through such a tapestry perhaps, we can follow the events of other's lives and see them in respect to ours, to know that perhaps we're not all that different at heart! Thank you... and yes, if you could just unbolt that last pin there, no, there... yes, that's it! Danny - Thank you for reading and replying! Claire - Lass, you also have the gift which leads to the downfall of so many men. You've captured me with this picture of beauty. Thank you friend, for such a lovely response! Princess Poet - Well then let me welcome you to the land where dreams come true. I'm grateful that you compare me to any poet, much less ones as good as you list. I am humbled. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent work here Chris, I wish I could write like this |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Could this be in Seattle WA. I just spent some time there and I found this place, sure enough it was the Blue Moon. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Christopher, This is beautiful, I enjoyed it alot. Thank you, Cerenity |
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Cassanova Junior Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 39Turlock, Ca. |
**Thud** That was me hitting my head with the palm of my hand. This just took me into a dream-like state. Whew, very vivid, raw and powerful my friend! Jason |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
WOW!! A happy ending...I'm impressed. Excellent writing as always my friend. This piece struck very close to this girls home. You seem to be able to write my thoughts better then I can. I bow at your feet. *giggle* |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
a fresh, wonderful renaissance of a new beginning... Kathleen |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
This just took my breath away. Gosh, I would never let you go! You are so gifted. |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow... this is really amazing. I feel belittled in all my poetic efforts. Maybe one day I'll write something to compare to this. "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Fly away free, Christopher! I liked this a lot. Corinne |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
This looks like it was most difficult to write. Was it? Beautiful poem, Chris. Marie~ [This message has been edited by mariee66 (edited 04-22-2000).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now was that clever or what? Bet you don't have time to do that again How's it goin? That truly was really nifty, loved the color usage to draw my eye and my pea brain together. Happy Holidays - going to be a lot of fun! |
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