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Dedication or Stupidity?

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Alone in the dark
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0 posted 05-15-2006 03:30 AM       View Profile for Alone in the dark   Email Alone in the dark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alone in the dark

My husband is a sportsman
from his head down to his toes
The stuff he'll use to hide his scent
brings wrinkles to my nose!

He'll dress in green and paint his face
to camoflauge his self
Then he'll sit for many hours
on his little treetop shelf

How can hunters stand so still
as they await the perfect shot?
For to stand in place for hours on end
takes patience I ain't got

And tell me why would someone want
to put a cricket on a hook?
Or go to such great lengths to catch
a record catfish or chinook?

I've seen the average fisherman
wade in water to his knees
When the sky was overcast and gray
and it was thirty two degrees!

Please help me find the answer
to this question plaguing me
Is this really dedication
or pure stupidity?

                    

© Copyright 2006 Alone in the dark - All Rights Reserved
midnightblues
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1 posted 05-15-2006 10:41 AM       View Profile for midnightblues   Email midnightblues   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit midnightblues's Home Page   View IP for midnightblues

Aw but I do detect that not so subtle hint of bliss
Sweetly expressive and great read!

Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

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2 posted 05-15-2006 09:49 PM       View Profile for Trillium   Email Trillium   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Trillium

I'm sure you'd get lots of arguments about this, both pro and con!

Trillium
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3 posted 05-19-2006 10:09 AM       View Profile for Joyce Johnson   Email Joyce Johnson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joyce Johnson

i like your poem.  Well done and humorous.
One does have to be smarter than the fish.  Joyce
picturegramic
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4 posted 05-22-2006 12:37 AM       View Profile for picturegramic   Email picturegramic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for picturegramic

I've wondered the same things like how could anyone shot Bambi? Thanks a commical yet insightful read.
thanks for sharing,

picturegramic :)

longte
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5 posted 06-02-2006 05:59 AM       View Profile for longte   Email longte   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for longte

Enjoyed this

A bit of comedy is wonderful
And poetry can express that so well
..
.
kif kif
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6 posted 06-02-2006 06:16 AM       View Profile for kif kif   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kif kif

Hello, Alone In The Dark.

Haha! a delightful, image-packed romp into marital bliss, and it is bliss, by the warmth in your tone.

Plus, you've captured the simplicity of the sportsman very well with your stucture, and easy flow.

(Trillium brought up an interesting point-I'm quite into gender specific writing...what you've done here is quite rude, although loving. You've subjectified your husband, like you would consider your dog! As a woman, I'm giggling, yet I can't help think I'd be blah blahing about subjegation if it were a man's poem about his wife! Yet, on 3rd reading, you have used the words "hunter" and "someone", so I'll let it go, although to be perfect in my li'l opinion, I'd like to hear him, as well as see him.)

definitely one for the bothy. Thanks for the read.
Alone in the dark
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7 posted 06-04-2006 11:49 PM       View Profile for Alone in the dark   Email Alone in the dark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alone in the dark

I didn't mean to pick on men. I wrote this as ayoung bride for my husband to make him laugh. It worked. I THINK.
Esmeralda Ponsonby
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8 posted 06-15-2006 03:57 PM       View Profile for Esmeralda Ponsonby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Esmeralda Ponsonby

I love this poem, and it is very thought provoking to say the least. I am a woman, and I say it is dedication not stupidity. As you said in the poem you would not have patience to sit there waiting, that sure puts a twist on the saying "patience is a virtue, seldom found in women, never found in men" I never thought about the patience involved before, waiting for the hunt to be had, but it's true there is definately patience exisitng in the hunt. So I would have to ask now, is patience stupid or dedicated?
Songbird
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9 posted 07-09-2006 11:54 AM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

Humor is good for the soul and this is a delightful poem!
Lighthousebob
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10 posted 07-09-2006 06:53 PM       View Profile for Lighthousebob   Email Lighthousebob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Lighthousebob's Home Page   View IP for Lighthousebob

Alone in the dark,


Big Smiles. Although I do tend to favor the idea that for one to go through such extremes to be dedication, you've certainly provoked a most humorous perspective here. Your poem was a lot of fun to read and I enjoyed reading it very very much.

-Bob
divine chaos
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11 posted 07-10-2006 02:21 PM       View Profile for divine chaos   Email divine chaos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for divine chaos

Coming from a lonnnngggg line of fishermen and hunters, I can so relate!! How adorably cute this is *grins*

~*Sheli*~
Alone in the dark
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12 posted 07-13-2006 04:00 PM       View Profile for Alone in the dark   Email Alone in the dark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alone in the dark

Thank you all for your comments. I'm glad everyone enjoyed it. As I said, it was written in fun, with love. I do believe it is dedication, not stupidity. It was a light hearted (maybe semi-jealous) attempt of writing about what I viewed as my competition! (I was barely 17, and just married)  


  ^*^Angel^*^
 
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