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Dennis L. White
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0 posted 2006-05-13 10:16 PM




green buds
attract the robin~
an empty feeder

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Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2006-05-18 11:14 AM


Nice Dennis.  I am not acquainted with this version of the haiku.  I've only seen the five, seven, five examples.  Joyce
Dennis L. White
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2 posted 2006-05-20 04:35 PM


Hi Joyce, This is more contemporary Haiku. Rule of thumb is 5-7-5 syllables or less to convey the word picture. Thanks for your comment. Dennis :^)
picturegramic
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3 posted 2006-05-22 12:39 PM


I also thought it had to be 5-7-5 but
you did paint the picture
I like to write in haiku because I find I don't have much time and that keeps me writing. thanks for sharing,

picturegramic :)

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4 posted 2006-05-23 09:46 AM


Dennis~
This is truly a beaut~

Thank you for showing up and sharing~
*Huglets*
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picturegramic
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5 posted 2006-05-23 10:16 PM


Enjoyable haiku I enjoy the style and enjoyed yours.
thanks for sharing,

picturegramic :)

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6 posted 2006-05-27 01:59 PM


Lovely picture....

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7 posted 2006-06-01 04:03 PM


Dennis,

Empty-nest syndrome or should I say "feeder" can certainly have its effects on our observing them.... Sigh. But, don't fret, my friend, they'll be Home when the food runs low. Smiles.

-Bob

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8 posted 2006-07-12 09:49 AM


Nicely done. I always have enjoyed haiku as it describes so much with so little

kitkat

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9 posted 2006-07-12 03:01 PM


Nice work Dennis!

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