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Purple Poet On Wheels
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0 posted 2004-11-20 05:52 PM




“I’m crumbling”
I said in a strong
Tone of voice
Unknowingly

“I can tell a lot from tone of voice”
Bruce said
“And you’re not crumbling”

“I’ve prepared myself”
She said
In tone of voice filled with
Intense angst, anger frustration and
Pain
Stemming from her parents’ tumultuous relationship
And chaotic family life
That she was just describing to me
I saw through the non-façade
Unbit my tongue
And told her what I saw
Within a minuet’s time
She begins to sob
And can only be consoled
By the arms of her lover



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passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-11-20 05:58 PM


sigh
Purple Poet On Wheels
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2 posted 2004-11-20 06:02 PM


I wasn't sure if I effectivly captured the moment

What do you think?

passing shadows
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3 posted 2004-11-20 06:04 PM


oh I know the moment so well myself
and yes, you did an excellent job

Broken_Winged_Angel
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4 posted 2004-11-21 11:51 PM


*blinks*

Very nicely done...and I agree, you did capture the moment there....

BWA

Your time is here.  Take one last look at it, then never come back.  This part of your life is already over...

Purple Poet On Wheels
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5 posted 2004-11-22 08:00 AM


Thank you both

I needed to be reassured

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