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wings of the moon
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since 2003-03-27

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Pink bubblegum land

0 posted 2004-11-04 12:42 PM

It happened while grousing by the wine-sea,
Or whale-road, whatever names you give it.
This dog had brought them to parallel me,
Black coats smelling of winter, closely knit
Dark yarn. I wore my glance-shirker outfit.
I like to think its here that he just
Allowed that membranous tissue to split
While attempting to hug some earthly rust.
My own hands and glance dig away from dog-fumed crust.

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2004-11-04 02:36 PM

I'm ashamed that I don't quite grasp the meaning of your poetry. Very interesting and I am sure that you very consciously meant not to reveal all. Joyce

wings of the moon
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 323
Pink bubblegum land

2 posted 2004-11-04 04:54 PM

sorry if it was abstract, i've since then altered it:

It happened while grousing by the wine-sea,
Or whale-road, whatever names you give it.

This dog had brought them to parallel me,
Black coats smelling of winter, closely knit.
I wore my glance-shirker outfit.

[I like to think its here that he just
Allowed that membranous tissue to split
While attempting to hug some earthly rust.]

My own hands dug away from dog-fumed crust.
even as they, with sand-swept smiles, offered me stranger’s trust.

this mini-glossary might help:
Wine-sea: I think is a quote (from memory) from book 5 of the odyssey
Whale-road is also a snatched expression from a troll-written book I believe.
Glance-shirker: avoiding glances
Membranous tissue: referring to hands as “my own” later confirms. This is a reference to Odysseus finally reaching land after swimming, and grasping it with his hands. Embracing the earth, the opposite of me, avoiding to look at humans/bodily substances.
Crust refers here to skin, or outer-layers on the people walking the dog.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2004-11-05 02:16 AM

Thanks. I knew the rationale was there, but couldn't extract it from memory. Very well written. Joyce

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