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aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia

0 posted 2004-08-18 06:38 AM



you think your doing the right thing
but your not
tou dont realise how much pain
your putting me through
youve ripped my heart
youve torn my soul
youve done the thing
you said you would not do
you have broken my heart
you have shredded it
into millions of pieces
you broke your promise
and made me cry
you were my everything
you were the reason i was breathing
now my oxygen has been taken from me
how am i to live
how am i to continue
what will i do
i dont want any other
i just wawnt you
why cant you realise
i dont care if you have a car or not
i dont care if your flat broke
i dont care where you are living
the only thing i care about is you
and you alone
you are my light
and that has been stolen from me
you were my life
and that seems dull and boring
with out you around tonight
your killing me
with your words
your killing me
by trying to do the 'right' thing

you are so scared of your feelings
you would think im going to dump you
at the slightest thing wrong
im not like that
im not like your last girl


this is a vent about my now ex b/f who dumped me today because he doesnt have a car any more, and cant get out to see me any more.....
sorry this is not really very good... i just needed a vent for these emotions that have being building up inside me all day

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

© Copyright 2004 Ruth - All Rights Reserved
Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...
1 posted 2004-08-18 11:16 AM


at;

a truly passionate and poignant write!
i can relate!
my wife moved out because she was convinced
it "was the right thing" and it "was so i could be happy" etc etc... eventually she realized she was just being selfish and
that love was what was really important; not self-centered excuses for one's own behavior.

thank you for the vent...
it provoked and cried out

tramp

PatAngel
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since 2004-04-05
Posts 451
California
2 posted 2004-08-18 09:03 PM


AussieTeen,

Your poem expressed much emotion. I could feel the anguish in your words. It was a very good write.

Love,
Patricia

'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go.
For dreams are the tiny seeds from which tomorrow grows.'

junemac
Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005
uk
3 posted 2004-08-19 04:55 AM


aww such a sad one. Very emotional. Nicely written.
Hugs June x

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
4 posted 2004-08-19 07:28 AM


thank you all for your kind replies...
you are too kind.... this is no where near my usual standards i set for my self.... and i wrote it in about five minutes....
thankyou all again

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

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