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junemac
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0 posted 2004-07-17 03:47 PM


Tearssting like shards of glass,
burst through my pain-proof dam.
Crash angrily forth - unstoppable.
ugly shameful torrent of self pity.
Inner grime is churned and spat,
from a litter-strewn memory house,
where I have dumped each hurt,
in bitter sweepings of cruelty.
Jagged remarks, razor sharp,
Lumps of solid gristly pain,
are spewed like fleeing rats,
from a suddenly un-blocked drain.
Then all at once the sobbing stops,
river of hurt has finally susided.
Leaving a residue of numbness,
clean and washed and calm.


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Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2004-07-17 10:55 PM


No not dark, very understandable and I hope the drain stays open.  Very well rendered.  Love, Joyce
PatAngel
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2 posted 2004-07-18 12:50 PM


Dear June,

Deep, emotion-filled rendering of pain. It brought back memories of a time when I felt the same emotions, only I could never put them into words. Very well written!

Love,
Patricia

'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go.
For dreams are the tiny seeds from which tomorrow grows.'

passing shadows
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3 posted 2004-07-18 03:56 AM


numb...I understand
junemac
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4 posted 2004-07-18 05:06 AM


Awwww Joyce thank you for understanding.
Hugs June x

junemac
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5 posted 2004-07-18 05:07 AM


Pat thank you, Yes it is a deep pain and a kind of deep relief when it is all cried out.
Hugs June x

junemac
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6 posted 2004-07-18 05:09 AM


Passing Shadows, I thank you for understanding, I am sorry that you have felt this too.

Hugs from June x

PKreturns
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7 posted 2004-07-20 08:44 AM


The dark stuff suits you very nicely June...A joy as always to read. (even if depressing *S*)
nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2004-07-27 12:53 PM


It's that kind of day for me...inside and out. Felt every word.

M

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