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Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06
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Could Be Anywhere...

0 posted 2004-07-08 11:55 AM


Exposed at Last?


Eyes turned down, shoulders as well

weight of generations so heavy to bear

reality of programing, forced into line

crushed innocence, never shared.



Hiding in corners, tears choked down

no comforting words for a child to hear

beaten then silenced, huddled in fear

terrified to utter the slightest sound.



Covering bruises for church and school

no one must ever, even guess or believe.

Within becomes the only refuge, or safety

inner one is strong, defiant, never bleeds.



Child within prayed the torment would end

watching the shadows of darkness descend.

Many years passed, yet the cry can be heard

Silently trapped in the depths of the soul.



Tears echo within protective emptiness

tortured body left behind, outside, divided.

Still the wounds fester, separation haunting

seeking solace, trusting no one, finding God.



He was there all along, but I could not see

the depth of His love or the tear in His eye.

A brilliant light chased the darkness away

as He cradled my heart with tender caress.


~~~~~


all righteee then...

this is a "duet",
a collaboration between the Trampster & PatAngel.
We thought our styles and similar
experiences might produce something
of significance if we wrote together
and here it is!
We wrote a stanza, then sent to the other...
who then added- back and forth til we were
fairly satisfied it was complete.
We are curious what everyone will think of it...


© Copyright 2004 Daniel James Burt - All Rights Reserved
junemac
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005
uk
1 posted 2004-07-08 06:12 PM


A great duet indeed !!
I enjoyed reading this and never guessed it was written by the two of you until I read the footnote.
wow !!! this is a triumph and with a very sad painful feel, ultimately ending in the warmth of finding your peace. Lovely.
well done to both of you and god bless you both.
Hugs from June x

PatAngel
Member
since 2004-04-05
Posts 451
California
2 posted 2004-07-08 08:26 PM


Dear June,
Thank you so much for your lovely comments. Tramp Poet and I decided to try something a little different in which we both could share the sad experiences we've been through, and how our hope and faith became strong in spite of them. May you be richly blessed for your kindness. Thank you again!

Love,
Patricia

'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go.
For dreams are the tiny seeds from which tomorrow grows.'

Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...
3 posted 2004-07-08 09:33 PM


thanks June!
re-reading for the hundredth time...lol
Annie couldn't distinguish between mine and
Pat's...wow indeed. i am so blessed to be able to write with Pat! Seems we share a voice for the ones who feel they have no voice...hoping these mutual words will allow others to face and express and eventually share...and in so doing be healed.

His love,
daniel  

Annie78
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since 2003-10-03
Posts 469
here then there then back here
4 posted 2004-07-08 10:00 PM


Daniel and Pat...All will be able to feel what is being said here...There are those of us that like you have lived this and so it would seem for us a very significant understanding. You two together have successfully blended and hit area's too often ignored. Thank you both for such wonderful poetry.

Love you both
immensely,
Annie

Joyce Johnson
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5 posted 2004-07-09 01:40 AM


What a wonderful collaboration.  So sad though that your creativity comes out of such pain.  Very brave of you both.  Love, Joyce
Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
6 posted 2004-07-11 03:52 PM


It is very well done ... I don't think I would have guessed two people wrote it either. I'm glad you found each other and both found a faith that's comforting to you

BWA

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