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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
when im with you i feel priceless when your gone i feel worthless when your with me nothing can go wrong when were apart i carry the weight of the world lying by yor side my heart is at peace at home by myself im cold and lonely in place of you there can be no other no one can compete no one has a chance i want you by my side because with out you there my mind and body are desolate and bare please stay around and make me yours because with out you there i am nothing and no one  i wrote this after spending the day with my boyfiend and i havent been able to stop thinking about him and i know this is basically an emotional vent but let me know what you think........ cheers Mel so this is me but what do you care about that???? |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
that is what poetry is all about :0) this is lovely. a very nice love poem. I especially like this stanza: i want you by my side because with out you there my mind and body are desolate and bare Well done ! Hugs from June x |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
thnks for the encouragement june.... so this is me but what do you care about that???? |
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PatAngel Member
since 2004-04-05
Posts 451California |
Many young people have the very same feelings. You've expressed it well. Great writing! Patricia 'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go. |
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