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junemac
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0 posted 2004-06-15 06:24 PM



He saw her finally, as she really was,
nothing more than a child in rose-scent
He watched the way she applied the paint,
carefully out-lining her soft lips in pink accent.
She was unlined, small boned, hardly formed
and yet ...

Like this she was a clever hook - - irresistable.
Watching her now though, his concience found her indigestible.

She had wrapped her hurt in nylon, lace and leather,
instead of in the arms of a loving mother.

He watched her erase the child with khol,
and tiptoed from the hotel room ... home.

© Copyright 2004 june macfarlane - All Rights Reserved
SPIRIT
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1 posted 2004-06-17 10:32 AM


Interesting and touching piece - enjoyed.
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2 posted 2004-06-18 11:04 AM


Provoking an well rendered.  Love Joyce
PKreturns
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3 posted 2004-06-23 01:46 PM


Interesting twist at the end.
junemac
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4 posted 2004-06-23 05:26 PM


thanks all. This kind of thing saddens me so much. Children being forced by cicumstance to grow up too soon. Sadly this happens much too often.


Hugs to all from June x

Broken_Winged_Angel
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Small Town, Somewhere
5 posted 2004-06-23 07:41 PM


Hmmm... This reminds me of an old poem I posted..

You're right, children growing up to soon is happening more and more each day

BWA

P.S. Well written. Thank you for sharing it

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