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junemac
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0 posted 2004-06-09 06:05 AM



A sticky-orange heat hung over the town;
heavy, claustrophobic, airless density.
A heat laden with tiny, weightless insects,
caught in a hot film of cloying intensity.
A distorting haze rose off melting tarmac
into suspended traffic fumes -- a psychedelic trip.
A blend of food aromas wafted up from open stalls;
a perfume of spoiled fruit, doughnuts, and traffic.

Dishevelled shoppers beaten into sluggish gaits
trailed overheated, irritable children and heavy loads.
Shiny, unmopped faces peered out from slowing cars,
waiting -- trapped expressions -- on traffic-clogged roads.
A quiet, almost siesta mood reigned in the noon hour,
market traders lolled, disinterested, in old deckchairs.
A line of people queue'd, restlessly for Ice-cream,
Cool thirst for quenching ice's, kept them rooted there.


Relentless heat beat down a submissive race,
hot pavement burned their soles and heels.
The sun scorched flesh on unscreened faces;
while a cat lay cooling in the shade of car wheels.

© Copyright 2004 june macfarlane - All Rights Reserved
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Member Rara Avis
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1 posted 2004-06-09 10:08 AM


This is a vivid picture of unbearable heat.  Well done.  Love, Joyce
Beasley
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2 posted 2004-06-09 12:28 PM


This is really intense. I can just feel the heat. Nice poem.
Love, Barb

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Member Patricius
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Idaho, USA
3 posted 2004-06-10 05:35 PM


Dear June:  I enjoyed the poem!  I wish we had a little of that heat here, right now!

Love
Betty Lou

Betty Lou Hebert

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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4 posted 2004-06-12 03:42 AM


Sounds like Mexico, to me....great descritive poem....you took me there.  
junemac
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uk
5 posted 2004-06-12 12:43 PM


Thank you all for your lovely replies. It is so nice to be back here and posting.
Big hugs from the U.K

June x

PatAngel
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since 2004-04-05
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California
6 posted 2004-06-27 12:41 PM


June,

The heat reminds me of Yucatan, Mexico. I was there for two weeks in March. You described the intense heat so vividly. Great poem!

Patricia

'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go.
For dreams are the tiny seeds from which tomorrow grows.'

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